Dovina
replying on Endurance by Dovina
11 Jul 2005, 1:28 PM
Yes, I had something in mind, but to spill it out defeats the purpose of implying it in a subtle way, hoping the reader will see what I mean. Still, I don't mind if you see something entirely different. Look at BlueMonkey's recent poem for an example of this.
Oh...no that's not what I was talking about but i guess I can see why you'd get that.
I'm assuming that because of the title, you are talking about an Arab teen with explosives taped around his stomach.
and why would I capitalize 'you'?
What who feels?
uh, ok.
Who can say what they feel? I think this might sum it up as well as any. Might want to capitalize You.
Good God, man.
I'm confused as hell on this one.
I kind of like this...despite what the general consensus seems to be..gotta go with my gut..
boo. You can and have done better.
Please refer to my reply to your comment on the suggestions page for my reason for giving this a 0.
If you're going to write about something like this...and be as graphic as you have, for God sakes, man, don't rhyme.
The first two lines get off to an irritating start because they imply a connection that is not there or not developed. You have not started from where the reader is.
Good rhymes. Not wild about the poem itself, but I'll give you a 6 for that.
discarded plankton? What's that, and how is it related to a well? Her head held low in the ointment follows the title, but the rest of the images don't seem to work.
In what way is it not good? Please do not spare my tender feelings in your answer. I listen to all comments, and believe it or not, incorporate many of them. Here I have not done the things you usually find offensive - preaching, explaining, using funny grammar. So, what?
Some of the unpredictably fascinating aspects of your comments are the âconnectionsâ you make and donât make. The world spins today just as it has for a long, long time. Its spinning follows the principle of uniformity, manifested in the laws of physics. How you find the former to be positive and the latter negative is beyond my imagination. But many things about your deductions defy my imagination. Like your recent comment to rbooey: âYou're about to suggest Dovina and I are in some buddy-buddy poemranker-dissing incrowd. . . . For your information, no two people dislike each other more than Dovina and I dislike each other.â I think you exaggerate in statements like that for the pleasure of controversy. Please donât tell me you mean exactly what you said.
Your question: âDoes it take more work to keep an already-spinning world spinning or to stop it?â It takes no work (as defined in physics) to keep the world spinning, but it takes a lot of work to stop it. (Sorry, no diagrams or charts.) The interesting thing in regard to being almost persuaded to believe in God is that the laws of physics are uniform, unchanging, as if planned. Itâs enough to make a person wonder.
Thanks for the comment.
Sounds like some lyrics I have read...They make good money...Could fly...yeah...sure...would like to here the music to it, though...