LilMsLadyPoet
on Drying, Cracked Roots by AnotherNothing
11 Jul 2005, 9:43 PM
The middle got a little loose, but this is cool...I get the thought. Fruitless places, things, people...things stagnant... resignation. I wish this would have been as good as the thought that started it...I would guess you didn't get it on paper as quick as it came to your mind. Gave you a decent score anyway!
Typo> I will never know you name (your)...other than that...I really like this...
typo> exist not exsist...other than that, I thought I wasn't going to like this, but then it sorta grew on me. I am not sure where the 'poured' and 'prepared' came into the picture, as that seems to be about cooking...but the rest I get, and haven't seen it said like that. original.
oh, dang...it was going along so well, and then the last four lines..ugh! also, >"Itâs to bad I canât think", should be TOO. I would be perfectly happy if you just dropped the last four lines...then I could give you a decent score...either that, or do something else with the ending.
Wow, this is wild...I like the night, the dark, the moon...I like the wildness of night breezes, and shifting clouds. But I suspect you speak of another kind of darkness, here. Yes, the sun...they say it is nearly as affective as meds, for depression. I love the ending line. Abrupt. nice job.
oh, man...sheesh...okay...yeah...got me in the gut....Very good...very good indeed. First read tonight..sheesh.
no prob, I do that half the time.
interesting. I missed it. now reading it
back I don't know what I saw.
I still like it.
Maybe there is a world where all is wonderful. She sees this world that way, and to her, it is.
What's it about.
since I got it wrong.
Thanks for clearing that up.
Read it again. It isnât positive. Itâs depressing as all hell.
I decided to become the anti-cockphage, and vote 10 on every single poeme on the site.
But then I thought, no. I can't be arsed.
I have decided to become the anti-cockmage, and vote 10 on every single poeme on the site.
But then I thought, no. I can't be arsed.
After reading the first line, I though 'ugh'. Not a good start, almost made me run.
I am glad I didn't because the rest is clever and serrated. I wanna be sedated.
nice positive emotions.
a good read.
sorry it confused you.
it was not my intention to be vague.
OK.
discarded plankton. microscopic food for fish.
discarded to emphasize the lack of care for.
head held down in a permanent slouch.
it suggest the ambiguous response to the question asked.
thanks for the questions.
hope it explains what I meant.