Re: a comment on The Big Stupid Dink :) :) by Bethy	Bethy 24.222.32.240	24-Aug-05/3:35 PM
Thankyou...and smiles are good...:) Bethy
Re: Wrapping a Gift by Dovina	Bethy 24.222.32.240	24-Aug-05/3:29 PM
This will be me on Saturday night...yup! I shaved my legs and got me a date...lol...*10* :) Bethy(a fav!)
Re: Wrapping a Gift by Dovina	INTRANSIT 64.12.116.67	24-Aug-05/3:28 PM
Who cares what he thinks anyway. I say, Cork Pumps and a pair of daisy dukes should do the trick!
Re: a comment on Quietus Proprietus by INTRANSIT	INTRANSIT 64.12.116.138	24-Aug-05/3:26 PM
And Christopher Reeves Thought he was superman till a bed-sore took him out.
Re: a comment on Quietus Proprietus by INTRANSIT	Dovina 12.72.4.44	24-Aug-05/3:24 PM
You hope right, but she looks enviable before that.
Re: a comment on Wrapping a Gift by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.4.44	24-Aug-05/3:22 PM
My job is done here.
Re: a comment on Quietus Proprietus by INTRANSIT	INTRANSIT 64.12.116.138	24-Aug-05/3:21 PM
you wanna get hit by a car? gawd I hope not lol.
Re: Wrapping a Gift by Dovina	INTRANSIT 64.12.116.67	24-Aug-05/3:19 PM
Yes this makes me happy.
Re: Quietus Proprietus by INTRANSIT	Dovina 12.72.4.44	24-Aug-05/3:17 PM
Funny, we each posted a womens-clothing poem at almost the same time, yours with a sadness, mine with a hope. I like yours a lot, maybe a little jealous of her.
Re: a comment on Wrapping a Gift by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.4.44	24-Aug-05/3:12 PM
Hold that thought, and try it again, please - revised.
Re: Wrapping a Gift by Dovina	INTRANSIT 64.12.116.67	24-Aug-05/2:58 PM
A bunch of no-nos. By that I mean you can just lose the beginning nos', the changes of mind.
Re: Crisscrossing My Mind by woodstock20000	Dovina 12.72.4.44	24-Aug-05/2:45 PM
"I lept to love you" - good. But some of of it is not stated very well. Example: "make the world accept you." - impossible, isn't it.
Re: Art serves a Purpose by i_am_the_popsicle	Dovina 12.72.4.44	24-Aug-05/2:38 PM
Leave out the parts that tell us what we think - "We all have." "you enjoy it." Your idea is good, but look at the grammar, and be a little slyer (is that a word?) in how you say it.
Re: a comment on The Stone Man by Bethy	Bethy 24.222.32.202	24-Aug-05/1:06 PM
Thankyou...I am glad you liked it...may I ask who NIN is...I am curious to know...:) Bethy
Re: a comment on With You at an Ancient Temple by Sasha	Sasha 68.49.8.49	24-Aug-05/12:29 PM
I don't think "rival ivies" has ever been used in a poem before, nor have "pallid jealousy" or "blessed blasphemy," how are they stylized? The grave accent is not as archaic as you might think. Witness: Yeats: "an agèd man is but a paltry thing" Alastair Reid (in translating a poem by Borges) "Blessèd are those who do not hunger for justice." "Unchanging" I agree is redundant as is "graced"
Re: a comment on No More Autumn Poems (Edit) by Sasha	Sasha 68.49.8.49	24-Aug-05/12:22 PM
I don't really feel it's superior, just different. It helps broaden one's exposure to poetry. For example Pound's voice was enhanced by exposure to the dreamy, somewhat non-linear world of Chinese poetry. It's true, there are certain things more abundant in the poetry of some languages than others. For example Russian 19th century poetry has a down-to-earth, quiet and unflashy feel to it. Women in the poetry of that era and before are dark-browed, sweet-featured and tender-voiced. But their faces launch no ships, let alone a thousand. Whereas in English a skylark is, all in the same poem, a "blithe spirit," a "Glow-worm golden in a dell of dew," a "poet hidden in the light of thought," a "rose embowered in its own green leaves" and a "cloud of fire." But as the same poem states "Bird thou never wert.."
Re: The Big Stupid Dink :) :) by Bethy	woodstock20000 209.40.29.18	24-Aug-05/10:56 AM
Made me smile. Thank you much.
Re: Art serves a Purpose by i_am_the_popsicle	woodstock20000 209.40.29.18	24-Aug-05/10:55 AM
Lovely.
Re: The Stone Man by Bethy	PsydewaysTears 69.252.193.18	24-Aug-05/10:38 AM
Sounds like it could be the chorus of a NIN song. Cool!
Re: a comment on Leaving the Woods House by zodiac	Dovina 12.72.23.185	24-Aug-05/8:42 AM
re: "each moment, a thing is new and discrete from the thing it was a moment before, so you can leave anything." It didn't come to me that way in the poem. It was more like "one moment ends and another begins." When your narrator says, "It's easy enough to leave a thing. You tell yourself the thing you love is gone," I take it as a simple form of rationalizing that's bound to fail. Your narrator seems almost too simple-minded to be believable.