Bethy
on i was an ass by hendrimike
25 Aug 2005, 1:15 PM
one nighters look just like that...lol :) Bethy
I have said it a thousands times...Life is the longest thing we have! good poem...:) Bethy
i think mariah's verse is "we can make a million promises"
wow that's the kind of one night stand you can see on an abc drama.
Thanks. I went through this about five times trying to get 8 syllables per line. I gave up and let my "ear" tell me what to do. I've wondered about a short caesura in that last line and I had a comma in it. You might be right.
The rest of it is good.
The last line might need an extra syllable I'm not sure but try sounding it out with "mankind's tide".
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My dear it's merely a matter of T's and Dâs.
You can choose to be chaste
or choose to be chased
but rarely is a woman both of these
for most men are lead from their waist.
"necver"?
This poem doesen't tell me anything besides what I've heard a thousand times. If you must do so, and it's okay if you do, then please, please use less outworn language. "Savior" for example needn't be here. You repeat yourself over and over and over. Say something more!!!
You can, just re-vote and your last vote is retracted
I read this several times to be sure I got the most out of it. Thank you for your time, Sasha.
circle of life...wish we could do something about it...it is a sad life at times...and it is also a joyous one too...good poem...:)Bethy
simply said...good poem...:)Bethy *8*
Reading this, has made me realized that its sooo true..where is that mudda..anywho, i give this a ten and 3 quarters..muhahah
And your classy-dressed superwoman was probably run down because some guy twisted his neck.
Hey, that's great. How about a spaghetti-strap top with a crinkle-skirt, just below the knee, so popular in Paris these days?
Who cares what he thinks? Who cares what he thinks!!!? Are you not listening to all the times I've harped at you? I care! You man, you. Oh, I see, you're one of those guy who says he looks past the clothes, so they don't matter. Well, at least allow me the fantasy.
nice...:) Bethy