Poemranker [Poem: Quietus Proprietus] [by INTRANSIT] Sun Nov 24 10:14:54 PST 2024

You should have seen her, though her Tiffany time had stopped she was in the perfect autumn ensemble ! Her pleated russet Votre-Nom slacks flowed as she kicked her tumbleweed Nine- West shoes proudly strutting out of Saks Fifth ave wearing a pumpkin Ralph Lauren sweater; a soulful salve. And neatly tucked under her arm an olive hand bag: Fendi. But none of it could defend her against the cold black Lincoln fender that made all of the pretty October colors scatter.

[9] Dovina @ 12.72.4.44 | 24-Aug-05/3:17 PM | Reply

Funny, we each posted a womens-clothing poem at almost the same time, yours with a sadness, mine with a hope.

I like yours a lot, maybe a little jealous of her.

[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 64.12.116.138 > Dovina | 24-Aug-05/3:21 PM | Reply

you wanna get hit by a car? gawd I hope not lol.

[9] Dovina @ 12.72.4.44 > INTRANSIT | 24-Aug-05/3:24 PM | Reply

You hope right, but she looks enviable before that.

[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 64.12.116.138 > Dovina | 24-Aug-05/3:26 PM | Reply

And Christopher Reeves Thought he was superman till a bed-sore took him out.

[9] Dovina @ 12.72.28.255 > INTRANSIT | 24-Aug-05/9:15 PM | Reply

And your classy-dressed superwoman was probably run down because some guy twisted his neck.

[9] zodiac @ 212.118.19.227 | 26-Aug-05/6:45 AM | Reply

No, you shouldn't. It's bordering on overcleverness now (you know the kind: the turn-of-phrase or hidden rhyme won't fit in the poem but you just can't stop yourself from including it.)

I like all of this except "she was in the perfect autumn ensemble"

[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.116.198 > zodiac | 26-Aug-05/6:48 AM | Reply

Rephrase? Delete? Why? , of course. Thank you.