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Crisscrossing My Mind (Free verse) by woodstock20000 Pacing,
slowly,
through the mists of our memories:
Rights, wrongs; didn'ts, should'ves.
I lept to love you,
hold you,
make the world accept you.
But I couldn't.
I don't know if I ever had
the power,
or if you could even let me.
But I tried.
(Healer, heal thy self be true...)
Maybe it was all just a selfish act;
a desperate attempt,
to obtain what I myself needed,
But maybe...
maybe
it was both.
Up the ladder:
Deliberate Exclusion
Down the ladder:
ebb flow
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Posted: August 24, 2005 10:51 AM PDT; Last modified: August 24, 2005 10:51 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.8509965 Overall Rank: 10551 Comments:
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Dovina @ 12.72.4.44
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24-Aug-05/2:45 PM
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"I lept to love you" - good. But some of of it is not stated very well. Example: "make the world accept you." - impossible, isn't it.
it was both...:) Bethy
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