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Crisscrossing My Mind (Free verse) by woodstock20000

Pacing, slowly, through the mists of our memories: Rights, wrongs; didn'ts, should'ves. I lept to love you, hold you, make the world accept you. But I couldn't. I don't know if I ever had the power, or if you could even let me. But I tried. (Healer, heal thy self be true...) Maybe it was all just a selfish act; a desperate attempt, to obtain what I myself needed, But maybe... maybe it was both.

Dovina 24-Aug-05/2:45 PM
"I lept to love you" - good. But some of of it is not stated very well. Example: "make the world accept you." - impossible, isn't it.




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