Re: a comment on Apollinaire: Mirabeau Bridge by Sasha	LilMsLadyPoet 64.12.116.138	27-Aug-05/6:59 PM
It is melancholy,like Moonlight Sonata is, in music, this is, in word. Beautiful. Thanks for sharing.
Re: a comment on orange crumble by impert&ent	LilMsLadyPoet 64.12.116.138	27-Aug-05/6:47 PM
Ah...a new word! Alas, I was feeling lazy and did not look it up! Thank you. Spall, then means crumble....so is it corrct to say, as the poem does> "bricks spall and crumble"? Would seem one and the same word. Like: bricks 'crumble' and crumble? I would think spall>chip away, is more of an action taking place, so that would not work in that context...? "Bricks 'chip away' and crumble" Would it be correct usage to say?: "Bricks spall, becoming rubble beneath the feet of passers-bye." Thanks for the info!
Re: a comment on Apollinaire: Mirabeau Bridge by Sasha	Sasha 68.49.8.49	27-Aug-05/8:31 AM
The French poem from which I translated this has no punctuation either Here are the first 6 lines in French, I've put punctuation marks in parentheses where they would normally be as prescribed by French writing conventions but aren't: Sous le pont Mirabeau coule la Seine(,) Et nos amours(,) Faut-il qu'il m'en souvienne(?) La joie venait toujours après la peine(.) Vienne la nuit(,) sonne l'heure(.) Les jours s'en vont(,) je demeure(.) Yes, it's lyrical.
Re: a comment on No More Autumn Poems (Edit) by Sasha	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.198	27-Aug-05/8:21 AM
Steely Dan / Bush literacy. ACE!!!!! I picked up a book by Cummings flipped it open and thought " my god! this is worse than the O'Hara I'm fumbling with!" and promptly put it back on the shelf. So, the upshot of this conversation is: Generally speaking, better poems have music in them. Thanks guys! 'Preciate your time.
Re: Lessons(revised) by bellafuego	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	27-Aug-05/7:30 AM
Truly an epiphany.
Re: a comment on orange crumble by impert&ent	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	27-Aug-05/7:26 AM
I looked up spall. Means chip away or crumble.
Re: Apollinaire: Mirabeau Bridge by Sasha	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	27-Aug-05/7:22 AM
I've never been the best at punctuation but shouldn't there be commas or something between "over/joy" and "come/bells". Was this a lyrical style poem? Sounds lyrical. It's probably the refrains that do it.
Re: Come Home Soon by Sunshine Conkey	Sunshine Conkey 205.188.116.69	26-Aug-05/7:59 PM
Thanx: my 21 year old son is in Iraq
Re: a comment on The Servant and The Messenger by ALChemy	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	26-Aug-05/7:28 PM
I was just attempting to explain the summum philosiphy and I believe I admitted it was questionable. Are you saying if the highest number I can think of is we'll say 100 than infinity is 101. Even the mathematical definition isn't that simple. Any where there is nothingness there is potential. You can only add something to nothing. Your definition of infinite nothing is an exceptable definition but obviously we're here in some way so it's not practical.
Re: American Semele (Edit) by Sasha	Bethy 24.222.32.243	26-Aug-05/7:16 PM
This is a favorite...*10* :) Bethy
Re: Crisscrossing My Mind by woodstock20000	Bethy 24.222.32.243	26-Aug-05/7:11 PM
it was both...:) Bethy
Re: Come Home Soon by Sunshine Conkey	Bethy 24.222.32.243	26-Aug-05/7:02 PM
Goose bumps...*10* the last two verse are my favs...:) Bethy
Re: Heaven is an uninspired piece of art by Enkidu	Bethy 24.222.32.243	26-Aug-05/6:59 PM
I really like this...it sings...it flows...:) Bethy
Re: Apollinaire: Mirabeau Bridge by Sasha	Bethy 24.222.32.243	26-Aug-05/6:56 PM
Days go by me yet I stay...I like this line...This is enchanting...I can see this poem...:) Bethy *9*
Re: a comment on The Moment of Over by Bethy	Bethy 24.222.32.206	26-Aug-05/6:01 PM
Thanks Bobjim...It is true...its why I am a single mom bringing up two little darlins on my own...:) Bethy
Re: a comment on Wrapping a Gift by Dovina	LilMsLadyPoet 205.188.117.13	26-Aug-05/4:49 PM
Zodiac! a kindred spirit, at least as far as that song goes...my all time ever, forever and ever, favorite! Isn't that the absolutely sexiest freaking song you have ever heard?! The entire song is about her in that dress, for those of you who don't know it...David Bowie's 'Cactus', off the Heathen CD...Is worth a definite listen. Oh...cool poem!
Re: orange crumble by impert&ent	LilMsLadyPoet 205.188.116.69	26-Aug-05/4:21 PM
spall? typo? (spill, fall?) made up word? new word I have somehow managed to miss? gap in my vocabulary? What of this wall?...you described it, now I wonder about it...perhaps you could add to this, make it more than just a description. Does this wall match how you feel? How the area feels? Dark and crumbling? Is it decaying while everything else around it is newly built and valued? Is there a contrast you can include, to make this wall interesting? Does is separate you from something, does it line something, does it hold up something of worth, or left to decay as if it is nothing, when it is in fact something? As it stands, it just stands and does not garner much if any attention. I need more than this if I am to take notice of this wall of yours.
Re: Tarragon by D. $ Fontera	LilMsLadyPoet 205.188.116.69	26-Aug-05/4:11 PM
I adore: "Her voice weaves sweet,"...awesome line...perhaps change chasses to 'shifts'?... 'She shifts and her hips send thoughts of romance'...etc.
Re: The Moment of Over by Bethy	Bobjim 86.136.123.199	26-Aug-05/4:05 PM
This is an amazing poem. Hope this isn't based on a true story. -10- and fave
Re: a comment on Tarragon by D. $ Fontera	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.198	26-Aug-05/6:56 AM
Mortar and pestle perhaps? I agree chasses has to go. But are we eating cooking or dancing here, um, perhaps it's (eat) that needs to go? Damn close though. Brings me back to Instructions to a sculptor by Christof.