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Apollinaire: Mirabeau Bridge (Other) by Sasha Translated from the French "Le Pont Mirabeau" by Guillaume Apollinaire.
"Sous le pont Mirabeau coule la Seine..."
Below Mirabeau bridge there flows the Seine
As for our loves
Must I recall how when
Sorrow was over joy would come again
Let night come bells toll away
Days go by me yet I stay
With hands entwined let us stay face to face
While underneath
The bridge of our embrace
Flow waters weary of an eternal gaze.
Let night come bells toll away
Days go by me yet I stay
Love goes away the way these waters flow
Love goes away
How life is growing slow
How violent the Hope that deals the blow
Let night come bells toll away
Days go by me yet I stay
The days the weeks pass by beyond all ken
Neither time passed
Nor lost love come again
Below Mirabeau bridge there flows the Seine
Let night come bells toll away
Days go by me yet I stay
Up the ladder:
The Instructor
Down the ladder:
Potential
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Posted: August 26, 2005 6:12 AM PDT; Last modified: August 26, 2005 6:12 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.851648 Overall Rank: 1566 Comments:
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INTRANSIT @ 205.188.116.69
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26-Aug-05/6:16 AM
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I just went back and read Zodiacs- Come away with me Carly- and it seemed to echo the sound/rhythm of a villanelle. So does this, to me. Am I right? Or do I need therapy? :/
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Sasha @ 68.49.8.49
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26-Aug-05/6:44 AM
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It does have repeating endlines especially at the end, so you'd be correct I suppose
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zodiac @ 212.118.19.227
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26-Aug-05/6:48 AM
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Maybe we're both riffing on the same standard.
Days go by me yet I stay...I like this line...This is enchanting...I can see this poem...:) Bethy *9*
I've never been the best at punctuation but shouldn't there be commas or something between "over/joy" and "come/bells". Was this a lyrical style poem? Sounds lyrical. It's probably the refrains that do it.
The French poem from which I translated this has no punctuation either
Here are the first 6 lines in French, I've put punctuation marks in parentheses where they would normally be as prescribed by French writing conventions but aren't: Sous le pont Mirabeau coule la Seine(,) Et nos amours(,) Faut-il qu'il m'en souvienne(?) La joie venait toujours après la peine(.) Vienne la nuit(,) sonne l'heure(.) Les jours s'en vont(,) je demeure(.) Yes, it's lyrical.
It is melancholy,like Moonlight Sonata is, in music, this is, in word. Beautiful. Thanks for sharing.
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