Re: a comment on The Gate of Heaven by TLRufener	zodiac 217.144.7.195	18-Nov-05/8:58 AM
That sentence is wrong on almost every count. You'll probably say I don't understand because I'm a man and therefore bound by reason. Or maybe (and more interestingly) you'll just say "flibbertigibbet". PS-I found this for you. A gift: "A man must have experienced all the illness he hopes to cure and all the accidents and circumstances he is to diagnose... Such a man I would trust." Montaigne
Re: a comment on not to settle for less than almost obliteration by ay deee	ay deee 204.90.50.252	18-Nov-05/8:51 AM
you might be right not the best for some cases, but as a coach pushes an athelete to perform, i also pushed my technique too hard in this particular instance the 'it' of the second stanza refers to an object in the fire unapt?
Re: a comment on Love letter by zodiac	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	18-Nov-05/8:49 AM
I suppose you could say it's all jingle but the last verse is the only one that sounds really catchy to me. You can't blame me really for thinking this went deeper when you consider most of your poems are quite complex or at least most of the ones I've read. I'm sure you'll now give me like 10 links to simple poems of yours and I welcome them. It was only a very slight feeling I had that you had some secret meaning behind it. I'm actually pretty damn happy to see a simpler side to you. "I've never dashed out a door, I'm just imaginative." Unless you are disabled the first parts a lie. But I know what you meant. I only meant the jingle gives things a repetitive effect. It replays in your head and I thought you meant to use the jingle to illustrate that this is stuff that goes on often. Shake the baby was kinda obvious. I do love the music of the piece. I can almost hear a kazoo at the end.
Re: dit da haiku by nentwined	cyan9 217.40.63.105	18-Nov-05/8:44 AM
I cant vote here for something that I just dont understand. This could be pure genius or feculent drivel, I have no idea. An explanation would get you at least another vote from me.
Re: a comment on Us Sinners by BrandonW	Dovina 68.127.85.83	18-Nov-05/6:41 AM
A2: Yes. There is no definition, except man-made. God will not be bent.
Re: a comment on Bread and blackthorns by Caducus	Dovina 68.127.85.83	18-Nov-05/6:38 AM
Of course.
Re: a comment on The Gate of Heaven by TLRufener	Dovina 68.127.85.83	18-Nov-05/6:37 AM
In trying to negate the innate difference between us, you miss many points.
Re: a comment on Racism by Dovina	Dovina 68.127.85.83	18-Nov-05/6:30 AM
Nor Wellington-clad cockneys, brogue-bragging limeys, or lily-liver Londoners.
Re: a comment on Submission by Dovina	Dovina 68.127.85.83	18-Nov-05/6:26 AM
As a woman, I wear my emotions under thick layers of superior wisdom and insight, which in all but a few necessary moments supress all the firey darts of chauvism. The apparent emotions that seem always visable are for seduction, the bait, the trap. It's all very well planned.
Re: Love letter by zodiac	cyan9 217.40.63.105	18-Nov-05/3:57 AM
Tight.
Re: a comment on Racism by Dovina	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.151.150.39	17-Nov-05/4:10 PM
What was the first thing you did when you discovered you were a Black?
Re: a comment on Racism by Dovina	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.151.150.39	17-Nov-05/4:09 PM
I notice you didn't include Blacks on your list...
Re: a comment on Haven by cyan9	zodiac 217.144.7.195	17-Nov-05/11:44 AM
I've always thought there's some confusion between intentional ambiguity (ie, you've thought of many possible reasonable interpretations and approve of all of them) and unintentional ambiguity (ie, you're just being vague and the truth is there's not even one very good interpretation but probably a lot of vague interpretations that the author is sort of gay.) However, the longer I write, the more I feel I'm guilty of the second kind. If I have to make a suggestion I'll say always aim for the first.
Re: a comment on Beneath the Willow Tree by cyan9	zodiac 217.144.7.195	17-Nov-05/11:40 AM
I've decided wasting time is the only dignified use of poetry.
Re: a comment on Beneath the Willow Tree by cyan9	zodiac 217.144.7.195	17-Nov-05/11:39 AM
Wow. I've never seen the word mana, but have always known manna. But you're right, I should have looked it up. Did any of the other commenters on this poem make the same mistake?
Re: a comment on Submission by Dovina	zodiac 217.144.7.195	17-Nov-05/11:37 AM
All her other math- and programming-themed poems are about me. I regret to say I probably didn't respond very well.
Re: a comment on Love letter by zodiac	zodiac 217.144.7.195	17-Nov-05/11:35 AM
This is a jingle. It's not an old post, just a new poem posted over an old post. I permit myself to do this because I've gone 8 months on this site without posting before, so I tell myself I'm not the problem. I've never dashed out a door, I'm just imaginative. The only unobvious metaphors are (a) my wife has a compound-word last-name so I always call her by compound words, including bellwether but also peashooter and lawnmower, among others, and (b) shaken baby syndrome. Look it up.
Re: a comment on Beneath the Willow Tree by cyan9	zodiac 217.144.7.195	17-Nov-05/11:27 AM
Please see Phenomenon, Fire in the Sky, Oprah, or any ABC or BBC daytime movie about comatose or vaguely transcendental people. On second thought, you'd probably do better not to see Phenomenon. It's fair enough to say this poem evokes images and emotions for other people. I'll rephrase: This poem doesn't evoke images or emotions for me. I'm just one guy. I think this site is better than allpoetry.com, but not for getting useful comments on your poetry.
Re: a comment on Haven by cyan9	zodiac 217.144.7.195	17-Nov-05/11:17 AM
I'd like to think I listen to me because I make sense, not because I paid for a degree. I'd also like to think that I make sense.
Re: a comment on Haven by cyan9	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	17-Nov-05/10:43 AM
It started with the willow tree poem and your right I should have minded my own business. It wasn't my fight. But I've been here a little while and I've seen what the approach you were taking to the comments has done to others who started here the same way. Sooner or later someone was going to put you through that big arguement we had and believe me I'm one of the nicer ones. Zodiacs a nice guy too but he's been here a long, long time and I figured he was tired of going through it with people. I do still apologize for butting in. Yes there are some very cruel people here but you'll find they tend to be easy to spot. For an example: http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=130308 Take it with a grain of salt and a sense of humor. You won't have to tell them they're asses, everyone already knows they are. Use the eye for an eye approach and make sure it's a zinger with no mistakes. I can see you're already getting much better at that. If you give away your anger (name calling is like a big flashing you're getting to me sign) then they'll pounce on you like wolves. I try to the best of my ability to go by these rules but yes everyone cracks every once in a while so be tough, careful and try to take the highest road. There are definately more people here who are quite kind (but we all have our mean days) than bullies. Dovina's another nice one. I'm sure you'll grow to love her soon, as we all have.