Re: a comment on Games by BrandonW	zodiac 217.144.7.195	29-Nov-05/3:05 AM
Not bad. Billy Collins isn't awful, but didn't deserve to be US Poet Laureate. I imagine some educated people made a big list of poets who hadn't criticized the war yet, and W just picked the one from Texas.
Re: a comment on Silent Night by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	29-Nov-05/3:04 AM
I guess under that metaphor I could say I suffer from Irritable bowel syndrome. Have you ever been accused of being DA P.I.?
Re: Silent Night by Dovina	zodiac 217.144.7.195	29-Nov-05/3:01 AM
AlChemy: Do you know these? http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=91617 http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=91677
Re: Silent Night by Dovina	zodiac 217.144.7.195	29-Nov-05/3:00 AM
A ream look at a fast pull, and no slang. You could have done this a lot faster by simply adding the word "not" to the beginning of each line. And it would have been just as clever.
Re: a comment on Games by BrandonW	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	29-Nov-05/2:50 AM
Most Windows operating systems come with MS word and unless you change it's settings it will capitalize the first letter of every line. I like to give people the benefit of the doubt. Have you read "Niether Snow"? I like it. It reminds me of driving in Pennsylvania.
Re: a comment on Picking Up Sins by BrandonW	zodiac 217.144.7.195	29-Nov-05/2:33 AM
Out of curiosity, what term do you use most often in normal conversation? In writing?
Re: a comment on Games by BrandonW	zodiac 217.144.7.195	29-Nov-05/2:31 AM
I've been reading a poetry anthology edited by Billy Collins where he (Billy) capitalizes the first words of lines I know weren't capitalized in their originals. It is a little off-putting. Seems like most poets I read do capitalize occasional poems, but nowhere near consistently. I think it's mainly a problem for people who aren't used to reading through enjambment.
Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	zodiac 217.144.7.195	29-Nov-05/2:20 AM
This sucks. You can't hold a metaphor straight for an entire line, but I'm getting called on inconsistent disses?
Re: a comment on Indian Song by ALChemy	zodiac 217.144.7.195	29-Nov-05/2:17 AM
I got "God turned his head," but yours is better. Also, leave "sin" on the end of line 3. AlChemy: If he's right on line 4, change it. The second stanza is perfect, both translated and not.
Re: a comment on The mountain has come to Mohammed by ALChemy	zodiac 217.144.7.195	29-Nov-05/2:13 AM
I warn you, it may star Jeff Bridges. In which case it won't make any money anyway, and everyone should just pirate it.
Re: a comment on The mountain has come to Mohammed by ALChemy	zodiac 217.144.7.195	29-Nov-05/2:12 AM
I do know the show and remember the song, which plays over a scene where the hero levitates using aerosol cans, among other things.
Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	zodiac 217.144.7.195	29-Nov-05/2:10 AM
Who's sensitive? All the Western women I know are well-adjusted and untroubled about things like whether they should be more or less feminine in the workplace. None of them think that, as far as the West goes, either sex dominates things; nor would they be able to say what either sex would dominate if it did. It's nice. We drink a lot and play Scategories. You're the ones who seem conflicted about things.
Re: Games by BrandonW	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	28-Nov-05/9:48 PM
Wrote this in MS Word huh?
Re: Picking Up Sins by BrandonW	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	28-Nov-05/9:43 PM
The poems fine but unless you're gay avoid refering to your dick as your cock in poetry. It makes you sound gay.
Re: a comment on Indian Song by ALChemy	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	28-Nov-05/9:18 PM
Almost perfect. Line 8 is slightly different but I like your interpretation. Your line 7 and 3 is missing one word. Otherwise some damn impressive deduction on your part.
Re: Silent Night by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	28-Nov-05/9:11 PM
Your honor, St. Peter. I bring you exhibit A: Silent Night by Dovina. The prosecution now rests it's case. "Wholly night" as in completely night is a weak line. Even Dan Brown would be walking on eggshells around this one. Your showing some guts and that gets you a "You go girl" from me.
Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	28-Nov-05/6:53 PM
Correction: The mystery lady did use perfume after washing his feet with tears and drying them with her hair.
Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	28-Nov-05/6:34 PM
I thought it was with tears she anointed his feet and I don't think the original says if that was Mary Magdalene or not. It does say he cured Magdalene of evil spirits and infirmities. Pretty much all the Gospels are purported. The Gnostics were the Spocks of the Christian sects, all about logic. I think its great that Mary's Gospel is the most logic based. It's a good message to women. To not let emotions fog your thinking. How can you not adore her now? She's an elevated version of you. The idea of a married Christ was done much better, much more original and much more feasibly in The Last Temptation of Christ. I think Dan Brown has more respect for cheap gimmicks than for women. I hope to see the rise of the church of St. Mary Magdalene. http://magdalene.wise1.com/
Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	Dovina 209.247.222.96	28-Nov-05/5:30 PM
It seems out-of-chaacter with the Mary Magdeline in the four usually-accepted Gospels. There, she poured expensive purfume on Jesus' feet and wiped them with her hair. In this purported Gospel, she is philosophizing like some elevated Dovina. As for having a sense of validation in the Bible, I might find it easire to imagine being part of the Bride of Christ than most men do. And I think Jesus treated women of his day with more respect than the average man did.
Re: a comment on Low by wilco	wilco 24.92.74.122	28-Nov-05/2:24 PM
No, I'm not looking for low votes and the experiment is simply working on not discarding something that sounds good in a song simply because the lyrics aren't my best.