Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	Dovina 209.247.222.94	30-Nov-05/11:30 AM
I looked at that and it's interesting. I don't have the time to look up where I saw that. Bias could be argued on either side, and it would take a lot of time to sort it out.
Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	Dovina 209.247.222.94	30-Nov-05/11:26 AM
Yes, and you still wonder.
Re: The copper man and Labrador by Caducus	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	30-Nov-05/8:23 AM
A bum dies (head tilted) in either a refrgerator or cardboard box filled with polystyrene packing. I thought it was in the alley next to a Versace store seeing that the odds of so many people walking past a dead bum while wearing Versace are quite slim odds. The copper is pennies. The Lab goes blue(sad). Neon reepers(ambulance). Muzzling(sirens) his grief. Medal from King George(quarter). The pauper box is planed.(His casket's ready) Lets just bury him he's shrapnel for our conscience and I'm late for my meeting.(Forget about him. It'll only bring us down. I've got better things to do. How'd I do?
Re: Focus by MacFrantic	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	30-Nov-05/7:50 AM
The only thing I would change is that I would space the lines and the words even farther apart.
Re: it's damp after closing by hendrimike	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	30-Nov-05/7:44 AM
It seems like every stanza is missing a line.
Re: a comment on leah by T. Jonathron Remp	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	30-Nov-05/7:29 AM
I mean your poems. I'm sure your a very nice boy.
Re: a comment on leah by T. Jonathron Remp	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	30-Nov-05/7:12 AM
Now see, if you could do this in your poems then people might actually like you.
Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	30-Nov-05/6:59 AM
"When two things are placed together in a sentence, and the two seem unrelated, I have to wonder why the writer put them together." Isn't that sometimes called poetry?
Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	30-Nov-05/6:56 AM
I shit you not. Ver-fuckin'-batim.
Re: a comment on Picking Up Sins by BrandonW	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	30-Nov-05/6:52 AM
See there truly is something flamboyantly offensive about the word.
Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	30-Nov-05/6:40 AM
Most scholars think John didn't even write John. Many think none of the three wrote the gospels. Show me a non-religious scholar who says they were written before 70 A.D. I could argue why your argument is totally religously bias but I think this guy does a better job. http://www.geocities.com/questioningpage/When.html
Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	30-Nov-05/5:58 AM
I'm guessing they couldn't find anyone to translate it into the King James version.
Re: a comment on Silent Night by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	30-Nov-05/5:52 AM
And that's not the only quality we share with black guys. I think it’s probably just a compensation thing. Like how blind people’s senses become more highly tuned. I'm not sure why rhythm would be such an important mechanism for dyslexics but it seems to be that way.
Re: a comment on Silent Night by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	30-Nov-05/5:34 AM
Is that line a quote or one of your inventions? Should be a quote.
Re: a comment on The copper man and Labrador by Caducus	Caducus 80.168.174.113	30-Nov-05/1:56 AM
Thanks the vagrant was dressed in the shadows of the people wearing versace and wasn't actually wearing versace. My grammar needs spanking.
Re: Games by BrandonW	zodiac 212.118.19.91	30-Nov-05/1:27 AM
Vague. Get some details in there. Who, what, where and when, for starters. Unless you're Chris Isaak - in which case, not bad for you.
Re: The copper man and Labrador by Caducus	zodiac 212.118.19.91	30-Nov-05/1:24 AM
You're missing apostrophes throughout. "vagrant's" for one, and "let's". I'm stuck on him wearing Versace. Maybe make it clear he's wearing handmedowns? Clearer than "shadows", I mean. In all, one of your better.
Re: Focus by MacFrantic	zodiac 212.118.19.91	30-Nov-05/1:22 AM
Why all the linebreaks? "I couldn't believe my sight" isn't a real expression, or particularly grammatical. "spleen and spry" is good, but you know for all intents and purposes they're opposites, right?
Re: it's damp after closing by hendrimike	zodiac 212.118.19.91	30-Nov-05/1:20 AM
I can't get past "we can all remember the past". There are about a million reasons why that's just not right. For example: 1. No, many people can't. 2. What you think you remember isn't really the past. The rest of this is good at what it's trying to do.
Re: a comment on The mountain has come to Mohammed by ALChemy	zodiac 212.118.19.91	30-Nov-05/12:57 AM
Jeff Bridges is the greatest actor alive because of his distinctive beard. Billy Crystal, Robin Williams, also only became respectable once they got beards. Moral of the story: Beard thyself. Hirsutamus papaliter.