Re: a comment on Mixed Quartet by Dovina	zodiac 70.109.2.131	24-Dec-05/12:03 PM
What's wrong with your English lately? I mean that seriously. Regarding the poem: I simply don't think mush is the solution to America's - or the world's - race problems. For one, it's not all that nostalgic, unless you mean it nostalgically hearkens back to when white people had simpler, more "colorful" ideas of what other races are all about. For two, Michael Jackson and a bunch of white guys sing a song about how everyone's together, black, white and yellow, and suddenly racism, continuing oppression, denied opportunities and such just DISAPPEAR? No, but a bunch of white people smile and tap their toes and go on about their business with little heartglows of undeserved righteousness. Then Hurricane Katrina obliterates a black ghetto of shoddily-constructed slum houses and everybody's like, How'd all our black people end up in one place? And such a desperate, dangerous, hellish place, at that?
Re: a comment on Privacy Compromised by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	24-Dec-05/12:03 PM
I am quite gothic-looking in left profile, and quite the modern poet when viewed from above and free from this tangle of sheets.
Re: Privacy Compromised by Dovina	Prince of Void 213.207.224.156	24-Dec-05/12:01 PM
my admiration to this poems slipped hints of mine i want to depict the gothic princess as the modern poet..
Re: a comment on Mixed Quartet by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	24-Dec-05/11:38 AM
I presume you mean this as an example of mushier mush than your opinion of mine. I tried so hard to bring a nostalgic idea down to hard reality, and it returns as mush. It's like giving him one of those cute fish ties for Christmas, and it just hangs mushily all year til he drags it out for my sake. Of such is the joy of Christmas.
Re: a comment on Mixed Quartet by Dovina	zodiac 70.109.2.131	24-Dec-05/11:10 AM
The star looked in across the threshold. The only one of them who could Know the meaning of that look Was the infant. But He did not speak. - Joseph Brodsky, trans. Seamus Heaney
Re: a comment on Mixed Quartet by Dovina	zodiac 70.109.2.131	24-Dec-05/10:45 AM
Who said I think it's only stereotypical racism? I think it's also well-intentioned mush, pure fantasy, a loving gaze in a wrong, and useless, direction, and other things. That's part of what's so dangerous about it. Nice dig with "admit', though.
Re: Paradise by TLRufener	Dovina 69.175.32.104	24-Dec-05/10:38 AM
I live in this place.
Re: a comment on Mixed Quartet by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	24-Dec-05/10:36 AM
You still won't admit that my nostalgic image of a Christmas quarted composed of four races, singing together in harmony with scarves about their necks on a wintery evening is anything by stereotypical racism, will you?
Re: Train of Thought by Sisterwolf	zodiac 70.109.2.131	24-Dec-05/9:44 AM
"in escape" in the last line could be better worded. And I agree with whoever said you should put some periods at the ends of your sentences. Possibly also break up this big block of text into couplets or tercets. (Yes, I know it's supposed to be endless as a train, but poemranker's fixed-width text makes long stretches like this look positively Everestlike.) Otherwise, this isn't bad. I wasn't blown away, but you kept me reading til the end.
Re: a comment on Obituary for the Moon by wilco	zodiac 70.109.2.131	24-Dec-05/9:38 AM
Is "Very unique voice here. Edgy and filled with imagery. Good stuff here" helpful to the poet?
Re: For Gillian Park by Caducus	BrandonW 216.78.60.189	24-Dec-05/8:52 AM
fuckin' great if you ask me!
Re: Train of Thought by Sisterwolf	some deleted user 204.97.18.79	23-Dec-05/5:17 PM
I love the language in this poem and your use of alliteration. good job.
Re: Just for Show (Suicide revised) by sliver	some deleted user 204.97.18.79	23-Dec-05/5:12 PM
Well written--I like sound of it when read aloud.
Re: Broken Bird by Sisterwolf	Dovina 69.175.32.104	23-Dec-05/3:07 PM
Somehoiw the "lovely bird" in line 5 seems inconsistent with the image built up of a put-down, tattered-wing bird with a low self image. Maybe "once-lovely." But it's a good poem, and welcome to poemranker.
Re: Train of Thought by Sisterwolf	Dovina 69.175.32.104	23-Dec-05/3:00 PM
Why not use periods at sentence ends? You've used commas, and I think the addition of periods would make it read smoother. Otherwise good.
Re: a comment on It's Time by PoeticXTC	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	23-Dec-05/2:45 PM
Bet Zeno got alot of headland from the ladies with that line.
Re: a comment on Obituary for the Moon by wilco	Sisterwolf 207.69.139.9	23-Dec-05/1:44 PM
Is such harsh critic, and ignorant language helpful to the poet?
Re: Obituary for the Moon by wilco	Sisterwolf 207.69.139.9	23-Dec-05/1:41 PM
Very unique voice here. Edgy and filled with imagery. Good stuff here.
Re: Zin/Enough/Things/Squeeze/Flow by gregsamsa222	Sisterwolf 207.69.139.9	23-Dec-05/1:39 PM
Stunning work. I adore the poetic device of reverse chronology - it gives it a stronger feeling of the death. Though it is long, it is a great read and kept my attention right through. Good job!
Re: disaster in the flesh by Crakyamuni	Blindpoetry 70.172.225.193	23-Dec-05/9:31 AM
"can you not see the death below us" seemed out of place, Crack Your Money