Re: a comment on Broken Bird by Sisterwolf	INTRANSIT 64.12.116.138	26-Dec-05/7:57 PM
You like her. I can tell.
Re: a comment on Hoi Polloi by INTRANSIT	INTRANSIT 64.12.116.138	26-Dec-05/7:51 PM
you're not even trying, are you?
Re: a comment on Hoi Polloi by INTRANSIT	INTRANSIT 64.12.116.138	26-Dec-05/7:50 PM
I read in a Penthouse once (might've been fiction) 'bout a gal who temped at one of them offices. Just what I was reading made me want to throw up. No, is the short answer.
Re: why? by nentwined	INTRANSIT 64.12.116.67	26-Dec-05/7:46 PM
just when you thaink that this is it, a train throws itself under your feet.
Re: Hoi Polloi by INTRANSIT	Dan garcia-Black 71.129.157.173	26-Dec-05/7:22 PM
U a gynecologist, T?
Re: why? by nentwined	Dan garcia-Black 71.129.157.173	26-Dec-05/7:18 PM
A good pimple but for a great pimple the end has to be about "Her." How about? "outweighed by You, you fat-assed, blood-sucking, faithless whore! But I will take you back, if you ask." That's a pimple '10.'
Re: Train of Thought by Sisterwolf	nentwined 64.60.192.131	26-Dec-05/6:13 PM
This has ome nice images, and a decent sentiment, but some of it is just too hackneyed. Punctuation would definitely help the reader follow what is written, but I don't know if that would really help the poem.
Re: a comment on Broken Bird by Sisterwolf	nentwined 64.60.192.131	26-Dec-05/6:09 PM
If you really want more detail, a) read the definition of a pimple poem; b) the rhyme scheme is hackneyed, nearly impossible to do well; c) the rhythm is off just about everywhere; d) your english is broken ("he taught she is ugly"?) e) you twist the word order to fit the rhymes you want Most of us have written stuff this bad. It's okay. You cannot improve this poem. Put it behind you and move on.
Re: Broken Bird by Sisterwolf	nentwined 64.60.192.131	26-Dec-05/5:52 PM
good pustule of a pimple.
Re: Paradise by TLRufener	nentwined 64.60.192.131	26-Dec-05/5:51 PM
boring.
Re: Apocalypse has come to end by Prince of Void	nentwined 64.60.192.131	26-Dec-05/5:50 PM
Makes me think of Bush.
Re: real fright of going home by veggiegurl	nentwined 64.60.192.131	26-Dec-05/5:48 PM
wow.
Re: Hoi Polloi by INTRANSIT	nentwined 64.60.192.131	26-Dec-05/5:45 PM
huh? :)
Re: a comment on It's Time by PoeticXTC	zodiac 69.132.67.140	26-Dec-05/2:18 PM
If anything, Zeno's proposing the opposite: that, logically, nothing functions. You can reach the door, although you should never be able to. Ergo, logic's occasionally bum. I dunno, maybe the music was playing a little loud and you thought he said you had fat thighs, instead of you're looking nice.
Re: a comment on It's Time by PoeticXTC	Dovina 17.255.240.138	26-Dec-05/1:53 PM
Zeno is very annoying. He is advocating the thesis that we ought not to follow our senses, but reason and logic in formulating beliefs. When the senses and logic conflict, he contends that the senses are the less reliable of the two, so they should be disregarded. His arguments get most of their power from appeal to the foundational assumption of Logic--The Law of Noncontradiction. This law is the thesis that a claim is true or is false. Most of my claims are both true and false, therefore I do not exist. Not all the ladies were won over by Zeno and his lines.
Re: real fright of going home by veggiegurl	Dovina 17.255.240.138	26-Dec-05/1:42 PM
The moon may well enjoy it. I think the use of 2, w/, 4, youv'e, and all the smily faces detract. As a tongue-in-cheek this is good, so I'm assuming good.
Re: Social Rant by fubang22	Dovina 17.255.240.138	26-Dec-05/1:37 PM
This is funny. Really.
Re: a comment on Apocalypse has come to end by Prince of Void	Dovina 17.255.240.138	26-Dec-05/1:33 PM
The words "highness" and "princess" make me more nervous even than "post modern poetry." Surely you jest on all three counts.
Re: a comment on Apocalypse has come to end by Prince of Void	Prince of Void 213.207.224.156	26-Dec-05/10:30 AM
thank u ..that was really a good comment ..by the way I'm a director ..even tv has influenced many arts like video clips and new arts ..and i shound unlearn to understand it better ..
Re: a comment on Apocalypse has come to end by Prince of Void	zodiac 69.132.67.140	26-Dec-05/7:54 AM
I'm influenced by television. But I wouldn't call myself Tom Brokaw. Be a god, if you like. I'm sure gods don't have to correctly spell poetry, or conjugate "have ever understood". Or know how to make a correctly-functioning planet, for that matter. Have a nice eternity.