Re: Three Skinheads by Caducus	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	19-Jan-06/12:23 PM
It doesn't make much sense but it's disturbing nonetheless. Needs some kind of continuity.
Re: a week off by hendrimike	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	19-Jan-06/12:12 PM
I bet the original version of this poem was even centered on the page.
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	19-Jan-06/11:57 AM
Cool, I scored 72.5% likelyhood of having a bestseller.
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	zodiac 209.193.14.236	19-Jan-06/11:52 AM
http://www.lulu.com/titlescorer/index.php
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	19-Jan-06/11:46 AM
"Dovina's face hold at least 3 pounds of foundation." See, it works.
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	19-Jan-06/11:43 AM
Me thinks this site should be added to the suggested sites on the "about" page or something.
Re: a comment on A tribute to our most precious Pearl by amanda_dcosta	zodiac 209.193.14.236	19-Jan-06/11:01 AM
Yeah, I didn't actually mean the Matthew passage to come into this discussion. I just thought it was cute. I also didn't mean Greek used the same word for spirit/ghost/breath; I meant Hebrew, Arabic, and Aramaic do.
Re: a comment on A tribute to our most precious Pearl by amanda_dcosta	Dovina 69.175.32.104	19-Jan-06/10:26 AM
In Mt.14:26 and Mk.6:49, the word is Φάντασμα, phantasma, an appearance or apparition.
Re: a comment on A tribute to our most precious Pearl by amanda_dcosta	zodiac 209.193.14.236	19-Jan-06/9:51 AM
Paul was writing in a tradition where spirit, ghost, and breath were the same word. In Greek, 'spirit' is most commonly translated πνεύμα (pneuma), which you might recognize from some other interesting words. 'When the disciples saw him walking on the lake, they were terrified. "It's a ghost," they said, and cried out in fear.'
Re: What is it about brothers? by Tara57	Dovina 69.175.32.104	19-Jan-06/9:51 AM
Overwritten. Try staying a little closer to reality.
Re: a week off by hendrimike	Dovina 69.175.32.104	19-Jan-06/9:49 AM
"footprints left for years to come" enigmatically true.
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	19-Jan-06/9:45 AM
Okay, nitpicking is better than name calling.
Re: a comment on A tribute to our most precious Pearl by amanda_dcosta	Dovina 69.175.32.104	19-Jan-06/9:40 AM
When the Apostle Paul wrote about the Holy Ghost, he was using King James English and a 1620's dictionary, so you are absolutely correct.
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	zodiac 209.193.14.236	19-Jan-06/9:40 AM
I sort of see it. In any event, you'd have to say "hold a foundation as truth"; you couldn't only say "hold a foundation" any more than you could say "hold a truth". Even then, it would be better to say you hold a bunch of things to be true, thereby making a foundation (that holds you.)
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	19-Jan-06/9:37 AM
When I hold a foundation, I believe it it. Like, "We hold these truths to be self-evident" A foundation can hold a person, or a person can hold a foundation as truth.
Re: The Frey by Southern_Bell	zodiac 209.193.14.236	19-Jan-06/8:11 AM
Frey is a disgraced memoirist. You mean fray.
Re: Relief (Ventilation Shaft rewrite) by cyan9	cyan9 217.40.63.105	19-Jan-06/1:41 AM
Origional Glaring at the glowing drops of steel As they dripped from the scarred anvil Like beads of tempered rain running Into crevice and crack like red lightning Forks streaking cross charcoal sky From whence rain came as cool ash Damping breathing, calming the very soul. Striking out with intention of murder Whipping up more anger to draw the victim, The strangler who sketched with chalk finger The outlines of bodies and dark little stories Venting to peace and evenings drinking Red wine with soft cheese following Extended visits to the patisserie. Darkness undressed her all scarred and withered, Weaving its storm clouds and pronouncing out loud “All should kneel then be proud” to yield to adversity, Any little difficulty could go unsolved so easily Until the day he turned away from all that hate, Turned around and remedied his complaints, his disdain.
Re: The Frey by Southern_Bell	cyan9 217.40.63.105	19-Jan-06/1:37 AM
The double line spaces add massively to the piece, drumming up suspence ... an enjoyable piece. The trussels line is a bit odd though, Im not even sure what they are, but they dont seem to quite blend in with this dark romancing poem.
Re: four walls by crwncka1	cyan9 217.40.63.105	19-Jan-06/1:34 AM
Reminds me of the film Labyrinth at the end with the staircases
Re: a comment on Heirophant by cyan9	cyan9 217.40.63.105	19-Jan-06/1:29 AM
Heirophant is also a voyeur of the future, depending on which deck is used. Reticent to the sparks -> The statues were shy to the sparks Its about working for / being tested by a master/maker figure, but receiving only chance rewards i.e. there is no certainty that their actions in doing good / avoiding evil will lead to reward.