Re: a comment on Is Dying Ugly? by D. $ Fontera	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	19-Jan-06/2:10 PM
Other last words: "Either that wallpaper goes, or I do." ~~ Oscar Wilde, writer. "I've had eighteen straight whiskies, I think that's the record..." ~~ Dylan Thomas, poet. "They couldn't hit an elephant at this dist..." (Killed in battle during US Civil War.) ~~ General John Sedgwick "Go on, get out - last words are for fools who haven't said enough." (To his housekeeper, who urged him to tell her his last words so she could write them down for posterity.) ~~ Karl Marx
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	19-Jan-06/2:05 PM
Okay, deep one, consider these racy racisms as variations on a theme – views from various temperaments. Or is there only The Temperment.
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	19-Jan-06/1:59 PM
It would have worked with one gram :(
Re: Where the Hell Did I Put My Glasses? by Joe-joe	richa 81.178.206.194	19-Jan-06/1:56 PM
A bit pedestrian. The language needs to be punchier, interesting.
Re: Racism 4 by Dovina	richa 81.178.206.194	19-Jan-06/1:53 PM
Racism is a theme not a poem title. Yeah I'm really deep. :(
Re: a comment on Spinning, reeling by ecargo	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	19-Jan-06/1:49 PM
I hear Osama wants a truce now.
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	19-Jan-06/1:45 PM
Dovina on my weena -14.6%
Re: Spinning, reeling by ecargo	Dovina 69.175.32.104	19-Jan-06/1:43 PM
Rant on. This war is getting tedious and almost ridiculous even for we who supported it in the beginning.
Re: Pain, I Curse Thee by woodstock20000	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	19-Jan-06/1:41 PM
I haven't heard a more redundant cry of anguish since, "Damn, you all, to hell!" or one of my favorites, "KAAAAHN!".
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	19-Jan-06/1:40 PM
Dovina's Day Off - 100%. (no, 14% actually)
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	19-Jan-06/1:25 PM
"My God's got a bigger cock" - 20.1%
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	19-Jan-06/1:19 PM
Dreamescape
Re: A comedian at nearly midnight by MacFrantic	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	19-Jan-06/1:11 PM
"Laughter swells into our smiles" is a throw away line, so throw it away. "Fuck Shoes" would have been a great title.
Re: Is Dying Ugly? by D. $ Fontera	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	19-Jan-06/1:07 PM
"Dying is easy. Comedy is hard." --The last dying words of Sir Donald Wolfit after one of his young actors said to him: "Sir Donald, after a life so filled with success and fame, dying must be hard"
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	zodiac 209.193.14.236	19-Jan-06/1:03 PM
"Let's Hear It for Homos" - 20.1%
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	zodiac 209.193.14.236	19-Jan-06/1:01 PM
"Why Can't I Ejaculate?" only gets 10.2%.
Re: Spinning, reeling by ecargo	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	19-Jan-06/12:57 PM
More of a punchline than a gut-punch ending. Pretty decent political rant though. Here's what I mean by gut-punch: "We got around to the subject of war again and I said that, contrary to his attitude, I did not think that the common people are very thankful for leaders who bring them war and destruction. "Why, of course, the people don't want war," Goering shrugged. "Why would some poor slob on a farm want to risk his life in a war when the best that he can get out of it is to come back to his farm in one piece. Naturally, the common people don't want war; neither in Russia nor in England nor in America, nor for that matter in Germany. That is understood. But, after all, it is the leaders of the country who determine the policy and it is always a simple matter to drag the people along, whether it is a democracy or a fascist dictatorship or a Parliament or a Communist dictatorship." "There is one difference," I pointed out. "In a democracy the people have some say in the matter through their elected representatives, and in the United States only Congress can declare wars." "Oh, that is all well and good, but, voice or no voice, the people can always be brought to the bidding of the leaders. That is easy. All you have to do is tell them they are being attacked and denounce the pacifists for lack of patriotism and exposing the country to danger. It works the same way in any country." " -- From Gustave Gilbert's Nuremberg Diary interviewing Nazi war criminal Herman Goering from his cell during the Nuremberg trials.
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	zodiac 209.193.14.236	19-Jan-06/12:56 PM
What was your title?
Re: A flightless deer by Enkidu	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	19-Jan-06/12:36 PM
Maybe the deer wasn't flying because it wasn't Christmas yet. You might want to use an animal that hasn't been associated with flying.(hint: Don't use pigs either)
Re: The funeral and the table by Caducus	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	19-Jan-06/12:31 PM
Loose the multiple rhymes in stanza 2. It doesn't fit the mood of the poem at all. Did you mean "No(w) he looks down on you"? The rest is great.