Re: Breakfast by Dhanesh M Kumar	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.44	11-Mar-06/12:29 AM
Will have to agree with the rest. Last stanza needs fixing. I ain't a great fan of politics and war... but I think, in my opinion, you have painted quite a picture. Bones for breakfast!
Re: The Tale of Hominus Ominus by Blue Magpie	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.44	11-Mar-06/12:21 AM
Good work. You got me going till the end. I thought that this would be just some stuff written only to fill a page , ie. when I saw the length.... but you pulled it through. pretty interesting.
Re: Navy Pier by matt door	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.44	11-Mar-06/12:10 AM
I ain't familiar with drinks... and tell me, Black and Tan, what is it? Beer? Yeah, cancel the 'Lake'. Good work matt.
Re: Piano by Dovina	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.44	11-Mar-06/12:01 AM
The three legged monster with a large stringy mouth..... I take you you haven't had very good experiences with the Piano. Good description of it though!
Re: Emo Kid by Fayt	Blue Magpie 212.205.251.54	11-Mar-06/12:01 AM
It works.
Re: Sour Apple by ecargo	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.44	10-Mar-06/11:52 PM
ecargo, somehow you're good. I get a taste of negativity or pessimism from your poems often, which generally I don't really like..... but somehow you have stuff that brings me back to read more of your work. Quite a bit of imagination too....
Re: a comment on Navy Pier by matt door	matt door 65.32.138.73	10-Mar-06/8:11 PM
Thank you.
Re: a comment on Navy Pier by matt door	ecargo 63.22.8.115	10-Mar-06/8:01 PM
Oh, yeah, and fix "Lake's."
Re: a comment on Emo Kid by Fayt	ecargo 63.22.8.115	10-Mar-06/7:58 PM
Now, that'd make a good poem.
Re: Windflower by matt door	ecargo 63.22.8.115	10-Mar-06/7:58 PM
"Primrose passion" bugs me, but the rest is pretty good.
Re: Navy Pier by matt door	ecargo 63.22.8.115	10-Mar-06/7:56 PM
I love it. My only suggestions: "it's" (line 3) should be "its"; and delete the period after laugh and lowercase "blew" (run-in), since it's modified by "breeze". Small stuff.
Re: a comment on Piano by Dovina	Dovina 67.72.98.94	10-Mar-06/4:19 PM
lol, got to go.
Re: a comment on Piano by Dovina	Ranger 62.252.32.15	10-Mar-06/4:16 PM
Well the crocodiles do it to project a sort of pleasent ambience towards the local plover population, whereas the whales do it to ensure the general marketability of such film franchises as 'Free Willy'.
Re: a comment on Piano by Dovina	Dovina 67.72.98.94	10-Mar-06/4:09 PM
Another demand of said talk is to point out that both whales and crocodiles have that cute turn-up smile at their mouth corners, showing happiness, but for different reasons.
Re: a comment on Piano by Dovina	Ranger 62.252.32.15	10-Mar-06/4:06 PM
Oh, and I'm not from Wales, I'm just living here temporarily, being a student and all that jazz.
Re: a comment on Piano by Dovina	Ranger 62.252.32.15	10-Mar-06/4:03 PM
Sorry, I thought it was the adopted 'ranker spelling. We ought to have a 'seafood dictionary' on here just for reference. And while we're on the Wales jokes, it's time for the mandatory terrible pun. 'Why is Wales so wet? Because of all the leeks.' In normal circumstances I would have avoided saying that at all costs. But all this talk of crocodiles, whales, prawn(e)s and Wales demands it.
Re: a comment on I’m unsaid and dead by Prince of Void	Ranger 62.252.32.15	10-Mar-06/3:59 PM
Yeah, I was thinking more along the lines of Camus though, as I'm assuming that's where our Prince of Void was drawing his inspiration from. All that 'absurdity' nonsense. Tch.
Re: a comment on Piano by Dovina	Dovina 67.72.98.94	10-Mar-06/3:58 PM
Interesting you spell "prawne" the way DA does. Oh, I forgot, you're from whales, I mean Wales.
Re: a comment on I’m unsaid and dead by Prince of Void	Dovina 67.72.98.94	10-Mar-06/3:54 PM
From Homer, Sisyphus was the wisest and most prudent of mortals because he rolled a stone up a hill only to watch it roll back down. But I think Homer was wrong because by that standard, the writing of poetry wiser and more prudent.
Re: a comment on Piano by Dovina	Ranger 62.252.32.15	10-Mar-06/3:52 PM
And besides, the crocodile/whale conflict has been going on for thousands of years now in oceans and rivers across the globe. If it stopped now the philosophers would be out of employment.