Re: i prefer steadfast by skaskowski	Ranger 62.252.32.15	15-Mar-06/7:47 AM
Very smooth, the title says it all. 'Let the ocean wrap me up and rinse away all my graffiti' - excellent.
Re: Endless Battle by rahson_s	Ranger 62.252.32.15	15-Mar-06/7:44 AM
'debut to a page' is quite good, so are the last two lines (although it would probably work better if the last line was just 'mind and pen'). So...what's with this general trend of people posting and not commenting on anyone else's works?
Re: Birthday by Dhanesh M Kumar	Ranger 62.252.32.15	15-Mar-06/7:41 AM
Last stanza was pretty good, didn't like 'torturous' though, I reckon you could find something more effective and less overused there. Stanza 1 was a little dry...it works, but isn't spectacular. Same for the first line of stanza 2. Other than that it's alright.
Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	15-Mar-06/7:38 AM
Well that's quite a paradox ain't it. Oh I see Dovina's talking about the infamous paradox God where everything he is contradicts everything he is. How did I not see that that must be the ideal God for her?
Re: Indianapolis Since by matt door	Ranger 62.252.32.15	15-Mar-06/3:26 AM
I don't know, I think 'the love of young wishes' works just as well. This is nice, you are very good at writing brief, nostalgic poems! I'm not sure about 'field of green and was', or 'perfect shade of once'...something a little more logical might fit better - but even so, it works well as it is.
Re: I want to slit my wrist and call it poetry by thepinkbunnyofdoom	Dark Angle 216.115.228.135	15-Mar-06/1:35 AM
"Love bound to lust is cheap and dies with our youth, stealing innocence. I never wanted this"......... is what i liked about this.
Re: a comment on Settling in by INTRANSIT	Dark Angle 216.115.228.135	15-Mar-06/1:30 AM
ecargo's got it! and i like the personification of the objects in your poem, which made me think of that song... i also had a run in with the song at the local karoke bar the other night, an old homeless lady kept going up and singing songs like that one, strangest experience in a few days, but i like in la/oc so i should be witnessing a stranger one any moment.
Re: Desolation by Beyond_Dreams	Dovina 69.175.32.104	14-Mar-06/7:54 PM
Another way of saying Verse 7 is "I don't have to sacrifice who I am to be happy with you." That's nice either way.
Re: Indianapolis Since by matt door	Dovina 69.175.32.104	14-Mar-06/7:45 PM
Seems like "the love of young wishes" should be "the wishes of young love." A nice sentiment.
Re: Mango Pickle by amanda_dcosta	Dovina 69.175.32.104	14-Mar-06/7:42 PM
I've never eaten mango pickle, and the seasonings you mention are mostly strange to me. Chilly would be chili where I live, and mango flesh is not white, but orange, almost yellow. I remember mangos hanging from long stems on huge trees in Hawaii. We picked them with a long pole, basket on top.
Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina	zodiac 216.67.6.102	14-Mar-06/7:08 PM
Obviously, AlChemy means your conception of God, not whatever God there is or isn't who is or isn't affected by what you think about him. While we're on the topic, Real God probably wouldn't allow himself to be put into or removed from rules and logic like some kind of, I don't know, giant tiddlywink.
Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	14-Mar-06/4:07 PM
Then who built the walls? If you say God did, I say, "That's His choice."
Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	14-Mar-06/3:53 PM
Nope.
Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	14-Mar-06/3:13 PM
Yes, but that's His choice.
Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	14-Mar-06/2:59 PM
If God exist the walls are already set for he by his own existence is confined to being God.
Re: a comment on We Do Not Write About by faithmairee	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	14-Mar-06/2:56 PM
But then part of the spot is being determined as in it must be somewhere along that straight line. You're saying infinity is a number which would place it in line with any string of numbers. Infinity is not a number but a concept. You might as well say 183 is closer to heaven than 182. http://mathforum.org/library/drmath/view/62486.html
Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	14-Mar-06/2:52 PM
Yes. To say otherwise is to build walls around God, or try to.
Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	14-Mar-06/2:38 PM
Also I have not removed God from rules and logic. God is governed by being God and whatever that might entail. If you throw that logic out the window then nothing makes any sense. See, logic and rules applied to God. I'm only saying it's probably way beyond our comprehension at this time what God is, does, isn't or doesn't do.
Re: a comment on We Do Not Write About by faithmairee	zodiac 204.238.24.4	14-Mar-06/2:36 PM
Well, it would be more like asking how much farther the undetermined spot is from NY than Texas when you know it's on a line connecting the two cities and also past Texas, heading away from New York. But not much more. I'm brushing up on number theory and learning all kinds of stuff I never wanted to know again.
Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	14-Mar-06/2:24 PM
One of the wisest things I've heard you say.