Re: a comment on Suicide Dream by Ranger	ecargo 167.219.88.140	25-Jul-06/10:14 AM
I read it as a suicide. I think it worked.
Re: Suicide Dream by Ranger	ecargo 167.219.88.140	25-Jul-06/10:13 AM
It's nicely done, Ranger. You have a deft gothic touch, both in the poem and in the (self-)quoted passage. Too bad Gothics are not popular anymore--you really get the eerie tone and imagery down. You should submit this--someplace like The Harrow (or maybe Kaolin's issue of the new GUD venture) that looks for dark-fantasy kinds of subs. What are you reading? This smacks of 19th century "horrid novels"--in a good way.
Re: turn back time by pollywolly	ecargo 167.219.88.140	25-Jul-06/10:06 AM
I like the idea, but it needs more. Such a spare poem, too, can't really support repetition of words unless it serves a purpose (i.e., "skipping"). Expand this--bring us along with you.
Re: Mind Over Madness by drnick	ecargo 167.219.88.140	25-Jul-06/10:03 AM
You've got some interesting lines ("more words to spill than ashes . . . "; the old curtains filtering, etc.). You keep it simple and don't overexplain things and let the details carry the meaning rather than pointing everything out (which never fails to bore the crap out of me when people do it--either we get it or we don't; if you have to endlessly explain, the poem isn't getting it done. This gets it done.) Good ending. Good poem.
Re: a comment on A Time to Dance by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.42.202	25-Jul-06/9:28 AM
I know you love me and my words. It’s a frustration, yes, to be admired by such a wide cross section of the populace. However my affections turn naturally to men who are better at addition. You see, Dovina + Menopause, when that occurs, and it will, will only mean a reduced need for birth control, not an utter lack productive activity, as it surly is already in one so ancient and limp.
Re: a comment on A Time to Dance by Dovina	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	25-Jul-06/9:18 AM
I love it when you get all wordy. I bet you always came near the top of class in grammar lessons. I was too busy fisting the dinner ladies for seconds, to care much for strucuture. However, there was a time, I'm sure of it, when we really bonded on a spiritual level, before you went through that change that most women encounter at a certain age: Dovina + Menopause = frustrated, redundant womb with habit of babbling in self possessed manner See; I can add.
Re: a comment on A Time to Dance by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.42.202	25-Jul-06/9:12 AM
Yes, it’s located near the big toe of the right foot, a pointed pump, poised and ready. But thanks for considering that it might be a more tender part.
Re: a comment on A Time to Dance by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.42.202	25-Jul-06/9:06 AM
It all began with your severely contorted logic, reflected even after my many admonitions. For example, how could I have stopped loving you and turned to pain over being spurned, both at the same time? Have you even learned the basic skill of addition? Aside from the improbability of receiving love in your present sagging, slobbering condition, your utter lack of reason is appalling.
Re: -750,000 in Rwanda by ALChemy	Edna Sweetlove 81.179.177.163	25-Jul-06/8:29 AM
Very amusing indeed. Certainly doesn't deserve its low ratings! Here's a 10 4 U.
Re: A Time to Dance by Dovina	amanda_dcosta 202.164.136.70	25-Jul-06/7:14 AM
Your preaentation of the poem is cool. I like the comparisons and the theme, and also the third verse.
Re: a comment on To Talitha by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 202.164.136.70	25-Jul-06/7:02 AM
Ranger, it's not your fault. I got disconnected too and could not log back in. I know that you are a happy-go-lucky person, but couldn't resist asking you that. :-)
Re: A Sexy Crucifixion Poem by Edna Sweetlove	lukehanney 84.43.108.4	25-Jul-06/5:29 AM
Vulgar and disgusting. Awful
Re: a comment on A Time to Dance by Dovina	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	25-Jul-06/4:23 AM
I have just read through all of our correspondence to try and identify when it exactly was that you stopped loving me and your love turned to pain at being spurned. This pain then turned to a festering wounded hanky of bitterness and recently outright hostility. I am sorry Dovina I would have loved to have started something but I don't date "differently-abled" Americans.
Re: a comment on The Man I Love by Dovina	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	25-Jul-06/4:17 AM
Does that mean they are high heels? I like high heels I am wearing some too.
Re: a comment on All Hail! All Hail! America The Golden! by Edna Sweetlove	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	25-Jul-06/4:06 AM
Who is that? China? America is quite the most detestable country in the whole world.
Re: I don't usually write erotica and this is no exception by Edna Sweetlove	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	25-Jul-06/4:04 AM
Love that lovejam refrence.
Re: Ode to the Irish Pub by mindsigns	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	25-Jul-06/4:01 AM
The Irish are the most overrated bunch of cunts in the whole world. The U.S. has two causes as far as I can see the Jews and the Irish. Both are a bunch of selfish fuckwits with a persecution complex. Both are money grabbing but the Irish have the differentiator of being alcoholic pikeys who make their money by building road whilst the Jews are better at building walls. I absolutely detest any lionisation of a romantic Ireland that quite honestly doesn't exist. The Irish are a bloated bunch of uncultured pisshead estate agents trying to turn Ireland into a gigantic mass of concrete. If James Joyce were in Dublin today he would not recognise it as the Irish try, in a distinctly pikey manner, to instil a class system and copy the Yuppie habits of their more successful, talented neighbours the Welsh.
Re: a comment on A Time to Dance by Dovina	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	25-Jul-06/3:34 AM
slag
Re: To Talitha by amanda_dcosta	Ranger 86.137.109.29	24-Jul-06/11:58 PM
Erk, sorry about going quiet on chat all of a sudden...it slowed down all of a sudden and refused to post. I think my internet in general seized up though. In response to your question, no I'm not like them. I'm a happy kind of chap with the compulsory occasional emo moments ;-)
Re: a comment on Suicide Dream by Ranger	Ranger 86.137.109.29	24-Jul-06/11:36 PM
Actually that's a damn good idea. 'Snapped by your own hand' doesn't quite go with it - unless I twist it so that the narrator has split personalities and killed himself. That would be awesome fun to write. You know, you're great for getting ideas off :-D