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turn back time (Free verse) by pollywolly skipping through
the sand made road
scuffed toes skipping
through the puddles
formed there
running faster
to get where?
Up the ladder:
despaired old age
Down the ladder:
A Frosty Fistful of Haiku
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Posted: July 22, 2006 1:31 PM PDT; Last modified: July 22, 2006 1:31 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.905148 Overall Rank: 9761 Comments:
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ecargo @ 167.219.88.140
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25-Jul-06/10:06 AM
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I like the idea, but it needs more. Such a spare poem, too, can't really support repetition of words unless it serves a purpose (i.e., "skipping"). Expand this--bring us along with you.
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