very well done 8/10

yes likeed this one 7/10

is this kinda dirty?

teenage angst

wow. i'm impressed. :)

Damn. That sounds kinda painful.

I enjoyed the end very much. The dead returning home.

There once was a woman from Taigan Who drew one hell of a floorplan She met a man by shore Though she found him a bore He paid her again and again.

hey - this is cool.

ahhhh, dat's chute.

Tucked away in a bap of shame.

a) "Frozen inaction" is stultifyingly redundant. b) "Immobile like the rock of Gibraltar" labours the point into a robo-shameful dullness. c) The plural of "how-to" is not "how-to's". d) You are trying to casually swear, but it's the most contrived swear ever. e) Dashes are weak. -10-

should be under the "pimple" catagory, no vote

Maybe you'll consider not changing my name so often, as it requires all of thirty seconds of purposeless effort and the soiling of several dozen cheap one-ply johnnies.

If I were a carney, I'd say you were a precious fifteen and a rube to the max.

Too bland for me. Sorry..

good poem

mine's better

silence calls straight to my soul? and you couldn't even think of a title?

first half cliche...sort of public domain adage. eventhough ? second half, powerless. average