It sounds fantastic, although I'm not sure that "underlined nothing" is such a catchy title...

It needs several reads to do it justice. Loads of punch, and the last line is the knockout blow. Awesome.

No time for a proper commente just yet but I will say this has fired me up to write something today. Cheers!

I like it – especially the first line.

I don't think you really need a 'you' to be an idiot.

Great. Fun to memorize. "But for the eyes' imperious intent To see the battered self, and not to weep" and "He stared into the eyes he could not rule." Brilliant staging. Yep, I'm gonna have fun with this one. I'll put you right next to Shelley's Ozymandias, how about that?

If I had enough sense I'd be terrified by this

I love "she speaks cream linen from painted lips." Too many dashes throuout.

It would be nicer if you give reasons to proclamations. I agree though.

I have a problem with the line breaks because I want this to fit a rhythm my tongue can get around without spitting all over my monitor. And with saying that I feel like I've justified the whole concept with which you write...or did I miss something?

last line - pretty good title spelling reminds me of a band

This needs a little more, or a little less. Perhaps lose the >Remember.

I likes.

Ha! I almost didn't like the word > chant. boo on me.

Sorry. Even broken up, rest of the best, bugs me.

Could you explain the term "movement" to me ? Using this piece as a for instance, if you like.

Yes, I like it better.

Play with the line breaks, would be my suggestion. From stanza two: drank from sweat and tears devoured refusal to stop searching for the promised land. no vote. yet.

Starlit night: Cliché Nightly gloom: Redundant cliché Find a less cliché word than "Ghostly" Other than that, not bad

Moon hanging: Cliché