regarding some deleted poem...	impert&ent 82.46.129.169	6-Jun-08/2:52 AM
I'll give you a 10 for the use of tractor in your title. and a -9 for the rest of it.
Re: Taste Ghazni by eliastemplar	impert&ent 82.46.129.169	6-Jun-08/2:54 AM
in-sense?
regarding some deleted poem...	SupremeDreamer 76.254.25.244	6-Jun-08/12:59 PM
Nothing, it just confirms that you're a hillbilly dolt with loose bow'ls.
Re: my love life by mystic enoch	SupremeDreamer 76.254.25.244	6-Jun-08/1:28 PM
Stop whimpering and LIVE. Go manifest destiny motherfucker. Who knows, it might inspire you to write something other than this dribble. Zero.
Re: You say goodbye by winniss	SupremeDreamer 76.254.25.244	6-Jun-08/1:29 PM
What quotebook did you steal that from? Zero.
regarding some deleted poem...	SupremeDreamer 76.254.25.244	6-Jun-08/1:31 PM
Apparently no one shall, everyone knows what happened to Jesus when he did that. Nine.
Re: The Testimonial to my life by Prince of Void	SupremeDreamer 76.254.25.244	6-Jun-08/1:34 PM
Can you make all that interesting and cut the self-pity by 80%? If so, perhaps a decent poem coming out of this just might be possible. Zero.
regarding some deleted poem...	half.italian 76.172.228.248	8-Jun-08/5:20 PM
leaning in the circle of its yolk
Re: sperladnik by malpaso	malpaso 70.233.172.172	10-Jun-08/7:30 PM
no one dares comment on the dreaded sperladnik...like the Inquisition, no one expects it.....mmmmbwaaahahahahahahahahahahaha!!!!!
Re: Daddy works at the Bank by Skamper	malpaso 70.233.172.172	10-Jun-08/7:38 PM
man, that's gross....I love it!!!!!
Re: Fuck stupid chemistry labs by jauser	T. Jonathron Remp 70.253.91.255	20-Jun-08/11:11 AM
More like this
Re: love 2 by little_angel_maria	nentwined 98.148.150.246	24-Jun-08/12:03 PM
Adding one word to a poem is not a significant change. This is "Realizing Love" by Richard Sheak.
Re: boy girl by little_angel_maria	nentwined 98.148.150.246	24-Jun-08/12:08 PM
This anonymously authored poem appears to be older than this poster.
Re: If I Could by little_angel_maria	nentwined 98.148.150.246	24-Jun-08/12:09 PM
This is by Sandra Lewis Pringle.
regarding some deleted poem...	nentwined 98.148.150.246	26-Jun-08/8:22 PM
that's certainly long. good progression. very good progression, really, in terms of images/concepts. I don't think the words work very well for me, or the flow on the line/stanza level. Too much is told, for me.
Re: A rock by nisim2	nentwined 98.148.150.246	26-Jun-08/8:26 PM
The English of this piece is very awkward. Reads like a school assignment? Not sure you meant dolor or color (though both work about as well?) They end-rhymes (and near rhymes) feel very forced (and AABB tends to jump out as juvenile when reading something).
Re: I Got Mine Designed by Skamper	nentwined 98.148.150.246	26-Jun-08/8:27 PM
funny that. random with a hint of purpose (I smell porpoise). I'd like to know a little more about what you got designed... maybe. :) I'm possibly missing a lot, here.
Re: Killer Gap by T. Jonathron Remp	nentwined 98.148.150.246	26-Jun-08/8:29 PM
The first stanza and three quarters really work, though I wouldn't expect them too. You're losing it for me where you break from the form and rhythm you've set up ((any form is tenuous and has a lot to prove about itself... and when you drop it, if that's not intrinsically meaningful, ...)) Interesting, though.
Re: Hardboiled Heart by T. Jonathron Remp	nentwined 98.148.150.246	26-Jun-08/8:33 PM
Could be good lyrics. The randomness of what you grasp at is the main detractor for me--I can't gel any particular image/meaning/point out of the poem, and that makes any possible insights ... less.
Re: not good enough by outoftouch	nentwined 98.148.150.246	26-Jun-08/8:34 PM
"she doesn't she that" -> "she doesn't see that" cant -> can't ... This belongs pretty perfectly in the pimple category. It's a common enough place/time/emotion, more for the writer of the poem than anyone else.