Re: dit da haiku by nentwined	nentwined 68.232.253.181	15-May-05/4:18 PM
Had to get this one in for posterity, off the end of the lsat one. I'm sure someone will forgive me. Well, maybe...?
Re: dit da haiku by nentwined	INTRANSIT 152.163.100.67	15-May-05/7:09 PM
S.O.S.
Re: Baggage (3rd ending) by INTRANSIT	Settle 68.226.91.98	15-May-05/8:16 PM
Too precious
regarding some deleted poem...	Alizarin_Crimson 24.250.22.18	15-May-05/9:32 PM
Well done.
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	16-May-05/4:18 AM
This smacks of blind devotion to crappers like Kurt Cobain but the shortness of the poem certainly has impact.
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	16-May-05/4:27 AM
Sort of monologue interior. A bit too rambling for poetry. But that's a matter of personal taste I guess. Get rid of those dots and brackets. Suggestion: 'Some of you are going to join the army Dying will be your art'
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	16-May-05/4:32 AM
I'm not responsible for a Niggah retro, I hope? In line 5 I think there's a 'with' too much. 'They have jobs at stores and shops and places', good line. It's all a bit psychotic, but I like it anyway. 'God turns bitch', my god...
Re: Baggage (3rd ending) by INTRANSIT	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	16-May-05/4:34 AM
Wow. Except for the last line where you loose me.
Re: "Monco" (In progress) by Alizarin_Crimson	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	16-May-05/6:07 AM
'Why? First of all, Monco never kills for the money' A surefire poem-killer
regarding some deleted poem...	al-naafiysh 204.215.33.199	16-May-05/6:37 AM
Do you know what a niggaz is?
Re: Majdanek by Niphredil	Niphredil 132.68.225.2	16-May-05/6:48 AM
This poem, as well as 'Shades', was written during a visit to the death camps in Poland. Majdanek made a particularly powerful impression on me, and I wrote those two poems following the visit.
Re: Shades by Niphredil	Niphredil 132.68.225.2	16-May-05/6:50 AM
This poem was written after a visit to the extermination camp, Majdanek, in Poland.
regarding some deleted poem...	blacksoul 204.215.33.199	16-May-05/7:00 AM
Ha Ha Ha now when I posted my poem thug culture about life in the hood I must have got all kind of nasty remarks because P. Ranker would'nt show them Now we get nigga turn bitch when you show them the steel. God turn bitch when you show him the steel so what you are saying is that God is a nigga too. hair like sheep wool skin the color of bronze. Let me tell you what a bitch is B=BEAUTIFUL I=INDIVIDUAL T=THAT C=CAUSES H=HARDONS BITCH TO A NIGGA MEAN WOMAN YOU MUST BE TALKING ABOUT A DOG
Re: On the Bank of Lake Michigan by jessicazee	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	16-May-05/7:42 AM
Disappointing.
Re: I want to know what a lifes like.... by Damien	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	16-May-05/7:45 AM
Good - not sure about the use of a / in the poem it leads to a question without the tell tale sign of a ? to signify such. However it still throughs some awesome shapes.
Re: Thanks again by Everyone	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	16-May-05/8:34 AM
I did not betray my friend Damien by publishing this filth.
Re: Old Lady and The Sea by Joe-joe	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.72	16-May-05/8:52 AM
Are you trying for a sonnet? Look at Beam Reach and compare it to The Catamaran. Both are mine, the catamaran being the first draft. You can hear the diff easily. " A comrade of the yawning deep " is excellent. 8. Hit it again.
Re: On the Bank of Lake Michigan by jessicazee	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.72	16-May-05/8:58 AM
But what I really whant to know is: are you Hagarian or Rothian?
Re: "Monco" (In progress) by Alizarin_Crimson	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.72	16-May-05/9:13 AM
The wavering oboe went Star-warsy on me for some reason. Cardboeard ghosttown/saturated survival rock.
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.72	16-May-05/9:18 AM
And another poet I have to hate due to quality issues of mine.