regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	9-Jun-05/6:42 PM
The (overlong) first part leeches the blood from the second part. That one is a amusing sketch, it could make for a poem on its own.
Re: A Kiss In Shadows (quite happy for me) by Caducus	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	9-Jun-05/6:46 PM
>>I thought of my love, Smiled till I wrinkled<< >>Just younger, And holding on to hope<< You can't do this. It's ugly and it makes no sense. >>there<<, in the first stanza. I don't get it.
Re: Road to Recovery by thepinkbunnyofdoom	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	9-Jun-05/7:03 PM
I don't want to spoil the party but I go along with Blindwriter. Agreed, due to the last lines the poem deserves a mentioning in the lower regions of the Best category, but the main part is mediocre, ànd with off-timing at the start ànd one moment of bad grammar. If this represents the best in poetry, I expect to be crowned King Genius within three weeks.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 69.175.32.185	9-Jun-05/7:49 PM
Written a bit crudely, as if by a junkie, which may be appropriate.
Re: lawngazing by skaskowski	Dovina 69.175.32.185	9-Jun-05/8:03 PM
The first verse is perfect. Second verse can be taken so many ways thet I wish it were more directed. Third verse is good, but when I try to relate it to the first, I come up wanting. Overall, I like this kind of poem.
Re: Why? by windyone	Dovina 69.175.32.185	9-Jun-05/8:08 PM
The first two lines express an important issue, but not very well. Criticism can help writers who have something to say, say it better. Most of the criticism here does not do that.
regarding some deleted poem...	hendrimike 70.106.122.122	10-Jun-05/12:25 AM
stupid nonsense...give it up cheech...<0>
regarding some deleted poem...	hendrimike 70.106.122.122	10-Jun-05/12:30 AM
here's a haiku: Old ass hippie dude/Giving everyone zeros/Takes it up the ass...<0>
Re: Yellow Am I by lil_evil_boi	hendrimike 70.106.122.122	10-Jun-05/12:55 AM
yellow seems like a simple kind of guy
Re: A Kiss In Shadows (quite happy for me) by Caducus	Caducus 172.200.21.127	10-Jun-05/1:29 AM
zero it rockmage go on you havent came in over an hour. I bet you have strong arms from all that self love.
regarding some deleted poem...	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 69.231.16.226	10-Jun-05/1:59 AM
Weird. a smoke. a g and t.. and an enema is just what I wanted.. nah. -8-
Re: it's tough at times by Jigg	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 69.231.16.226	10-Jun-05/2:03 AM
cries
Re: this pain by eliznhaz	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	10-Jun-05/7:04 AM
And one more mind-boggling look into the complicated spiritual innards of the tormented adolescent. My cup runneth over
Re: Muggy by fevriere	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	10-Jun-05/7:08 AM
>>This morning, I woke up with the morning<< Too simple. 'This morning, I woke up with the dead of the morning' (or whatever the American phrase is)
Re: A Kiss In Shadows (quite happy for me) by Caducus	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	10-Jun-05/7:10 AM
Quit fucking around with matters that don't matter, answer my comment so you and I can benefit. Goddamn it
Re: Missing by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	10-Jun-05/7:18 AM
I gave you a seven although I think you're a fraud, B_W_C. Mooning over atrocieties like l_e_b's 'Love is the opposite of hate', and then come up yourself with a poem like this one?
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 68.164.242.151	10-Jun-05/7:46 AM
nice weave, but....
regarding some deleted poem...	Caducus 172.200.21.127	10-Jun-05/9:19 AM
Almost fable like, very well written and different.
Re: A Kiss In Shadows (quite happy for me) by Caducus	Dovina 69.175.32.185	10-Jun-05/10:56 AM
This starts our really good. I don't know what you mean by the slabs rolling, or why she still looked 20. Verse 3 is great. Verse 4 is good. "wood" must refer to her cane. Verse 5 is a bit strange, and kissing on shadows of the lost - well, I see you relating to the old couple as you imaging aging with your lover, but it could be better said.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 69.175.32.185	10-Jun-05/11:04 AM
This is a good read even if I don't follow the story. Some good lines and some funny lines. Second to last verse is good. Sometimes I wish you would tell us a little more about what you speak of. Maybe I don't want to know. Overall fun to read.