I think it's actually quite enjoyable...good job.

you are a deconstructionist, in a twist of taking down all that has fallen apart.

My vote is that you meant shrubs (plants) not scrubs (Surgical garb). Perhaps, I just don't get it. Is this another Neverland ranch poem? -9-

I hear children's voices reading lines 12 through 14. I would hope that there are teachers in this country who might listen to their students as well as you seem to listen to yours. I admit that lines 7 through 11 are a bit off putting in that the images have already been overused in the daily media. But all in all, it seems to be an honest effort.

This is far to rough all over.

True. But you can stop by hating someone.

Facinating poems...

i like reading your mind

Words are not meant to persuade But to convey... perfect synthesis.

and i miss reading your heart

there should be an inhalation at the end of these lines.

as in bowls me over bowls

Let me guess...a library?

good start.. where are the other stanzas? I'll vote when you're done.

These are very funny! Did you write all of them; some seem familiar, but I'm not accusing you of anything, could be that they are just the kind of thing I've heard before.

It has such a nice rhythm that the lines which don't really stand out.

rockmage is worng. Nevertheless, this is a weak or incomplete poem.

Without your comments I would not have known what you meant. This has been true of several of your poems. For me, at least, more clarity and less poetic license would make a better poem.

Not a poem, but some good thoughts that could be made into a poem.

"for the love of you" is just bad. the genitive form of YOU is YOUR. "for your love" is a song by a reggae band (King Konga) a Country Artist (Chris LeDoux), and a classic sixties rock song (yardbirds). I even think Stevie Wonder sang a song titled For your Love. okay. bye.