Dovina
on The cat who would fly by nentwined
12 Aug 2005, 7:15 PM
Do you mean "off my face"?
"a past that's not yet happened" the cycle, the simple thing.
It does seem that simple sometimes.
"permutate" seems too strong. Otherwise I like it.
Good thoughts, but need better poetic expression.
The first 4 lines are good, given the tight restraint you've chosen. The last 4 lines drift from the theme.
Why do you want to trade what you have for propriety? Is it not better to be what you are? Maybe I misunderstand.
I never let Nobody in. > anybody in?
this is really good
Do you really think that what wasps are doing in their hives is, um, stinging things? Other than that, nice.
Hey, no one's done that wordplay before!
PS-I liked the spider-in-the-ear. But any poem that uses multiple linebreaks for dramatic pauses or the passing of time is an automatic minus-2. Sorry, those are the rules.
The best of your recent ones. -9-
And Joseph made haste; for his bowels did yearn upon his brother: and he sought where to weep; and he entered into his chamber, and wept there.
Still-Beating-Heart => Still-Beating Heart
English language learners need to know only 1,000 to 2,000 words to express themselves adequately in interpersonal language but 7,000 to 10,000 words for serious reading.
Cheng's interpretation is that 8000 words is about the maximum for an individual's actively known vocabulary. Of the authors he has surveyed only Shakespeare reaches an exceptional 10,000 words.
It has been determined for example, that the novel The Pearl by John Steinbeck which is used as a recommended reading at the English 10-2 level by Alberta Education requires an active vocabulary level of between 5000 and 7000 words to be able to read effectively. The average university student is expected to have a passive vocabulary of about 60,000 lexical units or about 150,000 words.
how dare you fart in my face.