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amanda_dcosta 202.164.138.155 |
17-Jul-06/11:13 AM |
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CRL... This is better than your previous post. It seems more inspirational and better worded.
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| Re: I hate making titles by drnick |
CherokeeRoseLoggins 67.140.224.214 |
17-Jul-06/11:20 AM |
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Was this suppose to be about lightning? Because that is the picture that formed in my mind while reading this. Sounds like the way lightning does around ehre in real bad storms. If so, then this is a good write. But I do agree with Ranger as for the last two lines;
To answer all,
The crackling calls.
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| Re: I hate making titles by drnick |
CherokeeRoseLoggins 67.140.224.214 |
17-Jul-06/11:21 AM |
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Sorry for the typo, it was to say here, not ehre.
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Dovina 12.72.43.142 |
17-Jul-06/11:29 AM |
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Better than your other one. Here the narrator comes to a crossroads, and rather that taking the path the average poet would have made him take, he chooses life. And the style is better here, has meter and some poetic phrases.
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| Re: ENIGMA, WONDER, BEASTLINESS AND FURY by Gopakumar |
CherokeeRoseLoggins 67.140.224.214 |
17-Jul-06/11:34 AM |
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A good concept, and with very good construction. So much truth in what you have written here. "beastliness of man," the cause of it all to start with. And I am not refering to the gender, but man, as in a whole, the human race. And the fury of nature, I guess because I am 3/4 Native American, or perhaps others may believe the same, but I do believe nature gets angry and lashes out.
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| Re: Intro by MacFrantic |
CherokeeRoseLoggins 67.140.224.214 |
17-Jul-06/11:43 AM |
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If only rocks could talk, for if walls could talk, what stories they could tell. LOL As an artist, I can see where rocks could have stories to tell, as like dead trees. So yeah, they could be poetry. You just made them so. LOL
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| Re: Tribute by creepshow |
CherokeeRoseLoggins 67.140.224.214 |
17-Jul-06/12:03 PM |
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Sounds like death itself. The demons perhaps? I could descride either really. Final death is of rot, and this reminds me of some of those movie called The Walking Dead.
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| Re: Get Over It by drnick |
Ranger 86.140.69.253 |
17-Jul-06/2:22 PM |
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One of the best I've read for months. Catchy, great rhyming, and an excellent punch at the end. Favourited.
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| Re: Get Over It by drnick |
Dovina 12.72.36.192 |
17-Jul-06/2:38 PM |
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I like the rhyme, the brevity, and her eye-liner. What I don't get is whether the sloppy hair is yours or hers. Doesn't matter, I suppose, a fad is a silly fad.
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| Re: Intro by MacFrantic |
Dovina 12.72.36.192 |
17-Jul-06/2:42 PM |
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Hope on - rocks in your barrel or not makes no difference. And the logic isn't.
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| Re: ENIGMA, WONDER, BEASTLINESS AND FURY by Gopakumar |
Dovina 12.72.36.192 |
17-Jul-06/2:48 PM |
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Much too repeatative to carry what little interest there is. These are commonly heard statements that might be made interesting if couched in something unique.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Dovina 12.72.36.192 |
17-Jul-06/2:53 PM |
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This is a nice sentiment. The copyright note is not needed; you own the poem without that. I would prefer to read your new work, rather than something from 2003.
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| Re: Get Over It by drnick |
amanda_dcosta 202.164.138.155 |
18-Jul-06/5:44 AM |
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The rhyming is good... and also the last lines. This time I see that you have a title for your poem.
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Caducus 86.137.20.84 |
18-Jul-06/8:29 AM |
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I just had to read 'Good King Browneceslas' to stop me from dying of boredom
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amanda_dcosta 202.164.138.155 |
18-Jul-06/8:37 AM |
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Very touching and effective. You got me.
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| Re: An Interview With King David by amanda_dcosta |
Edna Sweetlove 81.178.68.233 |
18-Jul-06/10:23 AM |
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Another hilarious gem! What drugs are you on? 10/10 for humour. Not.
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| Re: A Better God by Dovina |
Edna Sweetlove 81.178.68.233 |
18-Jul-06/10:24 AM |
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You'd make a better god than that Christian idiot some people like.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
CherokeeRoseLoggins 67.140.224.214 |
19-Jul-06/4:23 AM |
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There have been many peoms and other writings stolen from the internet, and the ones who stole them got a legal documented copyrights. The true author of the poem or writing could do nothing at all about it. I will not post a poem that I have not already paid for a legal copyright on. I have tried to unjoin this this group to no avail. I only came here again because I told my friend about you all. She joined, as I showed her the links to all that was ever said here. I perfectly understood about the remarks made this time. But I do not care to be in a group. I am not angry, nor do I feel any resentment. For one, there is nothing saying that this is a adult group, in which it is. And it is easy access for minors to see all that is said here. Mature is ok, but this group ahs a lot of adult material, and I really do not care about reading pornography. Please delete my membership
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| Re: An Interview With King David by amanda_dcosta |
ALChemy 71.241.66.181 |
19-Jul-06/10:14 AM |
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I can't get chat to work for me, sorry.
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| Re: no big box to live in by A. Nomaly |
Dovina 12.72.43.136 |
19-Jul-06/2:42 PM |
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Even with helter-skelter grammar, inordinate juxtoposition of voices, and line breaks that a novice could complain about, I followed it and liked it.
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