kingit
on some deleted poem
13 Oct 2003, 1:44 PM
reads like a pleasant, easy story
sooo romantic, like it, just wish I could FEEL it!
I thought about capitalizing, but recind---proper name, country confusion?
She stood at your feet? Was she in a hole? A person cannot be the epidome of someone elses desire. For example I can't say Mother Teresa is the epitome of my goodness. Other than that it's nauseatingly green.
This is great. What a wonderful idea.
This I like-- but love?...lovr, what's love got to do with It?
should be shot with a ball of your own shit! Take a 3 & a P
When I think of my own death, usually when I'm dealing with ignorant vultures like your neighbour, and all of the times I've died before this life. I know they were as slow and painful as a gut shot in the desert, as Jesus or Prometheus, and I always find myself proud and patient for its consumption over and over and over again, like the act of murdering or making love. And this sense of being and awareness is what seperates the REgal from the potato farmers, and what brings them together eventually as equals. However, my soul will not be coming back to this planet ever again, and I'm over it. Heaven, Hell, Life, Death, Love, all one and the same in the place of airless black forevers just outside the blue sky, just under the deepest ocean currents. The womb sits below the heart so that the child might know this enough to wipe it's feet before coming back. It's just upon arriving 'again' that one realizes, with a pleasant surprise, that they'd never even really left.
A nice start to. something.
10-4 sweet-stuff, I'm on IT
Jeez, I think you're right!--the ambiguities!
Somewhat understated, yet I enjoyed the subtext - this bit, "Ø£ÙÙسÙدر ÙاÙÙجÙÙØ Ø£Ùد ÙÙدÙÙÙ٠عÙÙ" is a fairly unusual usage, and I always like that kind of thing.
Small nit: "اÙإسر" should be "سراÙإسر"
Now if you could somehow make more sense with "planets I can live"
you forget to explain
Worth a good re-edit. You have some worthwhile style, but it's sullied with a kind of irresponsibilty. You settle forless than perfect. Also the last 2 lines must have some serious typos, the grammer is incomperhensible.
Well hello there!
Love it.