INTRANSIT
on Spuna by <{Baba^Yaga}>
18 Nov 2003, 8:04 AM
Wait, I'll get my wallet. What are the current shares at?
and a cymbal crash at the end!
well done.
-9-
A great lyric.
just cause i am gay 2 :o)
i am giving 2 much fucking 10
Just to show that i care
But if i give into insanity a 0
Just would be enough just about here:o)
Dragon of the fly
i wud not lie
Form'r not the later
is what ill give here
:o)
This is for You Larry & all those inane argument we had just to pass the time and for the sake argument. Hope you love it and nod to my beat - as you mostly do till an idea takes you on and press me brain, Like that one about, Elephants laying eggs; it still keeps a smile on me tired face.
Cheers to you friend - Friends of facts & insanity.
Hope the other guys doing their studies remember you like i do, or maybe a little more
:o)
:o)
Almost Dark Angelican. I think you could add to this. if you wanted.
Its a glosa - anyone heard of a glosa in these here parts?
basically, given a poem or some other text - you make another poem using each line of the first as last lines in each stanza.
Italics would have been nice, but the arrows are good enough, if perhaps distracting.
The last four lines leave me hanging, say more about being in there too, maybe one more line.
Slap my ass and call me sally, this poem rocks!
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
18 Nov 2003, 10:58 AM
I wish I could be the "her"...
what? no pantoum? and yet more homework for me.
S-5 L-3 missing an -o-?
Revised this poem...changed the words up
INTRANSIT wanted a pantoum; so here is a pantoum.
For those wanting to know, a pantoum is a malayan form. The second and fourth line of each quatrain are duplicated in the first and third of the next. No rules on how many stanzas, and there is an arrangement between the beginning and end too, which I would have to look up to refresh my brain - you can prolly derive it from this example.
I like this. Thanks for the lesson. Naturally, I have to write a better one now. You understand of course, but for now, I must say, I would give this a ten, but war in general just bores the Bejesus out of me. Especially the ones where everyone's crying in them. 9.
One sided, and lovely. 7.
ick -7-