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The dancers (Free verse) by richa I can see a henge and its stone
circle of bodies, some still, some
imitating the steps of a young dancer
slowly retracing and then collapsing
under gravity, then finding their feet
again. I could see ghosts live among us
colliding in the planes forged in air
wandering into us, placing their hands
on ours in much the same way as they.
I can see them dancing again
imitating shapes like a young dancer.
Up the ladder:
The Box
Down the ladder:
Natural Remedy
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Posted: January 10, 2007 12:19 PM PST; Last modified: January 10, 2007 2:35 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.452971 Overall Rank: 2906 Comments:
wondering at the "I can see"s and the "I could see"
seems unnecessary. and "under gravity" as is, doesn't provide much value, does it? Some beefier description of how the gravity works upon the dancer/stone. mebbe just a modifier for gravity; I don't know. "and then/[some simile of gravity], collapsing"/"then finding their feet" still, I like it alot.
A nice comparison and even a bit emotional, for which you should be ashamed.
"they." in S5 seems abrupt, as if something's missing.
'in much the same way as they' needed tweaking, in my opinion.
Wonderful, magical picture painted here...and so clearly, about an illusive subject. If you were a photographer you would have captured it on film. Very good! 263 view(s)
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On a seperate matter, why is it always the deeply unpopular people from school who attend reunions and dinner functions? Obviously in Burgers case it was a self serving opportunity to show off his reduced cheeks and explain how tremendously succesful he is selling mobile telephony equipment at phones 4 U.
I've only bought a Gieves & Hawkes personal tailored suit, which is still under construction (grey with very subtle pin stripe, 2 button, slightly angled pockets, no belt-loops, Cambridge Blue lining). Once my excellent tastes have reached some sort of equilibrium, it's time for fully bespoke.
My weekend wear looks something like this:
http://www.moviemaze.de/media/wallpaper/
http://news.bbc.co.uk/cbbcnews/hi/pictur
Of a weekend I usually wear this sort of outfit:
http://www.harristweedshop.com/breeches.
The outfit on the right being for casual frolicking on the estate whereas I wear this for church:
http://www.harristweedshop.com/tradition
I have interviewed a number of people lately who don't have the advantages afforded by a private education who seem to think it is "ok" to turn up to an interview with a tie knot the size of Anglesey and the shape of a Rhombus, their hair suffused in all manner of products and shoes coated in metal (not a gentleman's snaffle). I really do feel that "street culture" is in danger of overwhelming the good sense of sporting a pair of red moleskins when in town.
Huntsman do a nice one button suit and have an excellent range of house tweeds.
We quizzed Hunstman about their penchant for the single button: apparently, you can place a single button at exactly the right place, so when you button up the jacket it is perfectly balanced. With two buttons, you inevitably end up with the top one slightly too high.
Are you the -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. with personality? and the other one is the I.T. geek. I can only assume you work in a gentleman's profession such as hedge funds or private equity.