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The dancers (Free verse) by richa

I can see a henge and its stone circle of bodies, some still, some imitating the steps of a young dancer slowly retracing and then collapsing under gravity, then finding their feet again. I could see ghosts live among us colliding in the planes forged in air wandering into us, placing their hands on ours in much the same way as they. I can see them dancing again imitating shapes like a young dancer.

LilMsLadyPoet 11-Jan-07/8:29 PM
'in much the same way as they' needed tweaking, in my opinion.
Wonderful, magical picture painted here...and so clearly, about an illusive subject. If you were a photographer you would have captured it on film. Very good!




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