regarding some deleted poem...	26-May-04/5:17 PM
wow. I met a girl a couple of years ago who had this happen to her. It was, honestly, the hardest thing I've ever had to listen to in my entire life. -10-
Re: Get it straight by tre	27-May-04/4:15 PM
That is sort of.....Zappaesque?
regarding some deleted poem...	27-May-04/8:05 PM
It takes longer to heal the old wounds each time you open them.
regarding some deleted poem...	28-May-04/12:06 PM
While you do seem to regularly write about the same topic, I'm not going to deduct points for that. You write about what you want and this is not too shabby.
regarding some deleted poem...	28-May-04/12:09 PM
"It seems he cannot to decide whether or not": I kind of like this one but this line bothered me.
Re: The Bed by Fear of Garbage	28-May-04/12:12 PM
Are you really only 16? You don't see many teenagers that can write this well. Keep it up.
regarding some deleted poem...	28-May-04/12:16 PM
This would be good set to deathmetal.
regarding some deleted poem...	28-May-04/7:10 PM
How about Left Coast Hedonism? I don't know..I'm not good with titles. You are a very gifted poet and although I wasn't here when you were posting 'before', I'm glad that you are back. I've gone back and read some of your older work and it is very beautiful. This one is no exception.
Re: dancing on air by killingjuliet	1-Jun-04/5:38 PM
Nice, but I agree that you should drop the magical mystery part.
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Jun-04/8:26 PM
This is about an entirely differnt thing than I though it was going to be...
Re: STEP 4 by the codeine kid	2-Jun-04/2:02 PM
I liked it up until the very last line.
Re: Jimmy and Chichi Choo (Sub-Dylan Bullshit Blues) by the codeine kid	2-Jun-04/2:03 PM
It does sound kind of like some of Dylans writing...Somethings not quite right though...I'm not sure what it is...I'll have to think.
regarding some deleted poem...	3-Jun-04/2:03 PM
Pretty good. By the way, I went canoing with your husband this weekend. He's a pretty good guy.
regarding some deleted poem...	5-Jun-04/2:17 PM
The main part that bothered me was "a single pray prayed". I think maybe it should be "a single prayer, prayed"?
Re: Decks of Cards (So Long to the City) by wilco	5-Jun-04/4:02 PM
Just thought I'd try my hand at a country song (I do live in Tennessee, after all).
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Jun-04/8:18 AM
I like the beginning, but I think I'll hold off voting until you get it finished. Good job so far, though.
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Jun-04/3:20 PM
I think a lot of people are feeling this way. Good.
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Jun-04/7:24 PM
Great. I think I hear Billy Joel singing this one...or a sober Jimmy Buffett...
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Jun-04/7:27 PM
I think I can feel where you're coming from here..but I'm not going to say in case I'm wrong. I'd hate to look like an arse.
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Jun-04/8:49 PM
This ones got a good flow. It'd got well with music.