| Re: The War by Tarquin De La Bog |
14-Aug-02/9:00 AM |
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I have to agree with the writer of triangle poems. The varied rhythms are interesting - I feel the jerk and pull. In addition, I like the "drug of relief" - good image.
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| Re: Salt by <~> |
14-Aug-02/8:49 AM |
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You have succeeded. I am now thirsty.
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| Re: I LOVE YOUR HATE AND RIDICULE by http://janglingjack |
14-Aug-02/7:42 AM |
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Well, janglejack, you have succeeded in creating new uses for the ellipsoidal. You can take that away with you while you get some thicker skin.
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| Re: Day of Reckoning by Lenore |
13-Aug-02/1:13 PM |
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Fairy fart? That is creative. Homophobic ramble aside, do you have these strokes of genius often? I am looking for my father, read the text, and quit kowtowing. It does not look good on paper (or in this case a computer screen).
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| Re: Who am I ? by SkateBoardGurl5799 |
13-Aug-02/12:34 PM |
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Here's a bright young take on the state of things. Shouldn't this go in your journal?
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| Re: Day of Reckoning by Lenore |
13-Aug-02/12:16 PM |
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Who is this D.A. Are you from misery, USA. I am looking for my father. Everyone should read this before they write on this site!
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| Re: Walls by razorgrin |
13-Aug-02/12:13 PM |
I swear razor girl this is coming to an end.
Leomonade--Theory turns me on. Seriously, we have nothing better to do here than watch plains go over our heads and contemplate. What part of my last point did you miss? But hey, on a friendlier note, I am glad you picked up the Elliot/Chaucer punch, now I know someone on this site is schooled. Even if the poem is meant to be crap. And as far as writing classes go, half of them are like group therapy, filled with needy people and looking for art in the meantime.
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| Re: Walls by razorgrin |
13-Aug-02/12:06 PM |
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Jesus, razor girl, I am trying to move on, but everybody wants a piece of my poor hillbilly ass. I can't write fast enough. I have pete on my ass, you and lemonade. And I can only respond here. This is great work. Love it. (Is that better?)
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| Re: Walls by razorgrin |
13-Aug-02/12:01 PM |
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Why is that lemonade? Because I can spew drivel in two seconds and folks, even like you will give it credence. I am proving a point. (I have not ventured to your work yet, but I hope it is better than some of what I have seen so far). You are a coddling patsy. Are you a high school teacher that encourages this rubbish? Not the poem above razorgirl (calm down), but in general. I do not have time to coddle. I want to read good stuff and help those writers perfect their work.
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| Re: Walls by razorgrin |
13-Aug-02/9:54 AM |
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You people quit acting like flirting teenagers and write real poetry. What is the difference in color between blood and heart blood, and would a wolf go for that or the throat. This sounds like the resolving moments of a horror novel. With some work, it might change the conversation from where someone works to poetry. I suggest a rewrite.
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| Re: La tasse de vie by keatsImnot |
13-Aug-02/9:17 AM |
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Keats you are not. Try again, this time w/o caps.
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| Re: Winged Beauty by ThoughtfulSoul |
12-Aug-02/9:31 PM |
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you must have incredibly boring dreams seeing the same crap in each one. I must say young fellow you are the better of the gaggle of giggling adolescents that are taking up space from the real poets (five or six) on this site and that is not a compliment. anywho, hopefully college will give you a bit of experience and make these things you call lyrics and poems more interesting.
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| Re: Diminishing by <~> |
12-Aug-02/10:32 AM |
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aabba is a swedish band that surged back into popularity with the release of Muriel's Wedding - quite the sad flick. they turned down a billion USD to reform. Now that is a love poem. and this poem is quite clear and the title leaves nothing to the imagination. the first sentence is a base, the end is a point. i shall check out this so called hours fellow in my search for worthiness.
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| Re: My Hidden Love for You by Kriss |
12-Aug-02/9:36 AM |
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i swear i just read this. why don't you just tack it on to the other poem and make it one long turd of a journal entry.
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| Re: Diminishing by <~> |
12-Aug-02/9:20 AM |
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Is this a poem or a triangle?
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| Re: Something Strong by Kriss |
12-Aug-02/9:10 AM |
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my dear, even hallmark here in kc misery would smirk at this rubbish. save if for your adolescent journal. this here is a poetry site - not a medium for young folks to clutter with words of misinterpreted hormones.
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| Re: Can't we be together? by Urban Reenchantment |
11-Aug-02/7:10 PM |
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