Re: a comment on The Coming Light by poetandknowit	28-Dec-02/12:03 AM
Again, I have no idea what you are talking about or why you are talking at all for that matter. I could care a less who you are. You are a terrible excuse for a writer. But you are doing a fine job of making yourself look like a first class idiot. And that you do have in common with horus8.
Re: a comment on The Coming Light by poetandknowit	27-Dec-02/11:40 PM
Sure thing maestro.
Re: a comment on The Coming Light by poetandknowit	27-Dec-02/11:23 PM
I have no idea what you are talking about.
Re: a comment on Things by Quarton	27-Dec-02/11:19 PM
And unless you are dealing with Magna or Huffy (which I cannot vouch for) or other cheap versions, bikes are not made on an assembly line.
Re: a comment on Things by Quarton	27-Dec-02/11:18 PM
How exactly does it reflect a bias and a bias of what? I was suggesting a fine book that deals with the meat industry in ways that are quite original and thought provoking. As far as the other, maybe you have not read Pete Singer, which is odd if you are a proponent of this sort of thinking. Hmmm. That would explain that. It is not in TN, it is in MI and it is quite an interesting place if you ever get a chance to visit. Look, the poem may appeal to a certain sect of the population, which can use it for their propaganda, but as poetry it is sap. Do you think I was serious about the mantra bit? It was a humorous allegory. Geez. I gave you a zero because I have heard all of this said exactly this way. I want to read something thought provoking or genuinely emotional. Resorting to general themes of this issue just are not going to do it.
Re: a comment on plain by blackball	27-Dec-02/11:10 PM
Cut - i was left standing, by myself. Start with holding hands with air. that communicates that you are alone. The fact that you are reaching (by holding hands) with air creates an image that the narrator was left. So this works. Change stared to staring. Take the reader there with you, make it active. I get confused after that. What are you saying. You mention one moment. They day (or night) of the leaving, then you mention days. What is going on there? What do you want to say?
Re: a comment on plain by blackball	27-Dec-02/10:52 PM
That comes through. I think what horus was aiming at was a reduction in language. You can do this by making the passive phrasing active. I stand correct on the anything. I did not see the double use of noticing. You have something here; it just needs a bit of tinkering.
Re: plain by blackball	27-Dec-02/10:46 PM
Make it active rather than passive for staters. "nothing" to anything.
Re: Your sacrifice by Crakyamuni	27-Dec-02/10:42 PM
I watched my aunt's apartment complex burn to the ground at Christmastime when I was six. My step-grandfather knocked a candle into a trashcan in the bathroom. That is what started the whole shebang. Some say he did it on purpose. He was an outsider in the family. I think it went on behind backs for years. But he is dead now. I remember sitting on the swings at the little playground there watching the whirl of the fire truck lights and the flames wild twist and turns and families running all over the place and my family and my aunt all crying and hugging each other and praising the lord, which I thought was odd considering the situation, and I thought it was the coolest thing ever. Unlike this poem.
Re: Brackish by <~>	27-Dec-02/10:05 PM
Your images are wonderful. Just wonderful. The first stanza..wow. Let me think on this one a bit, read it a few more times and send along some thoughts.
Re: a comment on im playing basketball by rockinindividual	27-Dec-02/9:35 PM
He received in the mail a few days ago, as did the other 65,000 subscribers to Poets and Writers Magazine a postcard for the Iowa Writer's Conference. That is what placed the fictitious idea in his head. Just like when he listens to Cake, he conjures he writes the lyrics for them. Just like he says he received a GED in the brig, yet he graduated from a high school in Michigan. Besides, can you get into the armed services without a high school diploma if the draft is not in place? Let's see, he frequently visits the ranch of Val Kilmer in Taos with his made up son to fly paper airplanes and slam at the Poetry Circus there. This is odd, because I did not see or hear of anyone there named Jeremi Handrinos. At least not in the later rounds. See, he is a hard hittin street poet in the nature of Jim Morrison (although The Doors replaced Morrison with The Cult's lead singer for the upcoming tour, which is now on hold, so he failed there). And because of this he is constantly creating, even if it means personas for himself. He is a true genius. And although anyone can get into the conference with a check, conferences are a joke. He is already a far better writer than myself. So please, give him three cheers and a kiss from Tommy Lee, his next-door neighbor.
Re: Things by Quarton	27-Dec-02/9:21 PM
Put the Pete Singer down and step away from the poem. I feel like I am reading a generic mantra read before a march of protest to Ted Nugent's United Sportsmen of America Headquarters in Michigan during the opening days of hunting season. You know, there is good fiction out there on this movement. Read "My Year of Meats" by Ruth, shit I cannot find the book anywhere in all these piles. Fuck. Well anyway, look it up. It tackles the subject with a bit of originality, whereas this falls into sap.
Re: a comment on im playing basketball by rockinindividual	27-Dec-02/9:10 PM
This coming from the master of taut writing: Mr. Horus8.
Re: a comment on One Country by poetandknowit	25-Dec-02/10:21 PM
Indifferent to what?
Re: a comment on guitar music and lies by w~* ATHENA *~w	24-Dec-02/1:56 PM
Must you vote on the work of a plagiarist?
Re: a comment on Dirty bomb, code name: PLUTONIUM by horus8	24-Dec-02/1:53 PM
Oh my god, Becky, look at this truck driving idiot get on his knees and suck dick. Stop it now, be serious. I have a broken finger and it hurts to laugh. He is not insane; he is an insecure freak. If you were more observant, you would notice these things. But then again, you must be in the same uneducated boat sinking on Lake Superior.
Re: a comment on The Coming Light by poetandknowit	24-Dec-02/12:43 AM
Considering the poets you read and your ignorance about the state of American poetry and the enormous chip you carry around I would really not be so proud to state an opinion. Becase they are a joke. You revealed your cards. Stan Rice. hahahaha. You have all his books. hahahaha Is there a problem with having an education and not relying on a fast food company for a fucking paycheck, brig boy? Man, I hope you succeed in soap operas, because you are going nowhere else with the talent you have and the big bad GED. Except maybe Kmart, when the looks fade and the agent stops calling. Yes, 8 bucks and hours for you. But it will be worth it. Because when you die, you will finally be recognized for genius. hahahahahahah.
Re: a comment on The Coming Light by poetandknowit	23-Dec-02/7:50 PM
Time is not an illusion to me and ultimately I disagree with the statement as a pure goofism. It is something to be reckoned with and understood, just like we have throughout the ages. It is also a continuing metaphor throughout my work. So really, I don't give a fuck if you have trouble with it. Go read hour8's new poem. Maybe you will have an easier time with that one. Merry Christmas.
Re: a comment on The Coming Light by poetandknowit	23-Dec-02/7:28 PM
Please, do not get used to it.
Re: a comment on The Coming Light by poetandknowit	23-Dec-02/7:27 PM
I'm impressed. Diplomas all around. Of course, I am sure it is not brain surgery.