Re: Mean Matt was so mean, when a homeless guy asked him for change he gave him a -blank- by beakism	7-Sep-02/2:57 PM
What the hell is that: a nail, a penis or a rocket. Or do you leave it open to interpretation?
regarding some deleted poem...	7-Sep-02/2:58 PM
Did not mind the beginning, but then you lost me with the time is a winner line, and then the last line seemed even weaker.
Re: Sunshine by alexander	7-Sep-02/3:00 PM
I am kidding with you Beaker. But not with this God sort. He knows what he is doing.
Re: Sunshine by alexander	7-Sep-02/3:09 PM
I don't know? You told me about voting on your own poems. So maybe you have all the insight there. And maybe I'm off base, but when he is around, like this morning, certain poems in certain places always get zeros with know reasoning behind it. I do not mind a zero, but do not hide under a blanket. Tell me why. If he were to speak, he would merely say: it is to get his work higher. Not that this is a contest, but I just like to bitch. Or have you noticed.
Re: Sunshine by alexander	7-Sep-02/3:10 PM
I don't know? You told me about voting on your own poems. So maybe you have all the insight there. And maybe I'm off base, but when he is around, like this morning, certain poems in certain places always get zeros with know reasoning behind it. I do not mind a zero, but do not hide under a blanket. Tell me why. If he were to speak, he would merely say: it is to get his work higher. Not that this is a contest, but I just like to bitch. Or have you noticed.
Re: Water Droplet by craiggiarc1971	7-Sep-02/3:33 PM
Is this s kid's poem?
regarding some deleted poem...	7-Sep-02/7:16 PM
The show don't tell philosophy comes into play here. It's an emo poem.
regarding some deleted poem...	7-Sep-02/7:56 PM
Sorry, in the chatter with DA. Emo as in excessively emotive while trying to be edgy.
Re: My cousin's baby sitter. by Bachus	9-Sep-02/5:56 PM
Not necessiarily. from tinywords.com Haiku are extremely short poems written in 17 syllables or fewer, often (but not necessarily) arranged in three lines of 5, 7, and 5 syllables each. Haiku make use of concrete imagery or sensations, not abstractions or metaphors, and are often (though not always) concerned with the natural world. In our view, haiku should point to an actual, lived experience and, in so doing, evoke deep feelings in the reader. As haiku poet and author William Higginson writes, "The central act of haiku is letting an object or event touch us, and then sharing it with another."
Re: My cousin's baby sitter. by Bachus	9-Sep-02/6:02 PM
Plus, a good number of Basho's (the main man) haikus were nowhere close to 5/7/5, but they were all under 17 syllables.
regarding some deleted poem...	9-Sep-02/9:48 PM
It can be a haiku (see comment under bacus' poem about marauding a cousin) although it really is more of a statement than an image. But fair enough and fun all the same. right-o.
Re: Russian Roulette by <~>	9-Sep-02/10:01 PM
You just changed the style of this. Last time it came up, I set it aside because of the style, so wise choice in the change. You used laugh in some form 5 times and crack 3 times - is it intended repetition? Third stanza is excellent, but I have trouble with the second and the poem seems to drag along at times to the end. Seems you mixed some moving and downright fine images, with "just getting it all out on paper." Take the comma from behind "left." I think it has more power without any pause and it creates a nice image. Just a thought. I don't know, I like the poem overall, (it is not a triangle) but it could use some tightening, especially in the 4th stanza.
Re: Lonely Night by faded	9-Sep-02/10:08 PM
I just hear the flipping Brian or Bryan Adams song in my head, "Baby, I just can't stand another lonely night, so come over and save me...." and on and on. Plus, this poem is full of tender hearted cliches.
Re: I Love You!! by Babieflirt	9-Sep-02/10:47 PM
?????????I LOVE YOU TOO??????
Re: A Well Worth Wait by savannah	9-Sep-02/10:48 PM
Hey you and BARBIE have the same exact ending. And even have ?????????? all over the place. Oh well, can never say it enough: ???????I LOVE YOU TOO?????
Re: untitled#3 by darby pyn	9-Sep-02/11:48 PM
I do not like this, so listen to GW. It is so well done (as in over cooked) that I can almost hear you trying to be clever. I want the words to come effortless; these seem forced and contrived. And add an apostrophe to your.
Re: Waking Up by PawnedTidal	9-Sep-02/11:52 PM
This is teen angst rubbish! When you leave mommy and daddy, you can sleep all day if you like. Fuck the world, YEAH!!!! I am the anti-chirst, cuz I wanna be anarchy....and so on.
Re: non ars poetica by genezapoetica	9-Sep-02/11:53 PM
Good idead lost in odd style.
regarding some deleted poem...	9-Sep-02/11:56 PM
This is one lone Pete poem. Babble, in other words, that does not amount to much. I didn't think it would ever end. Where is pete anyway.
Re: Not in front of the kids. by darby pyn	9-Sep-02/11:58 PM
The title overused and makes me start a song in my head before I even start the poem. I like the style; you used it in the other poem, but I have the same feelings. I can see you ticking away, but I do like this one better than the other.