Re: a comment on Why you don't fall through the floor by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?	19-Jan-04/2:42 PM
You are correct, 11.6 cm is rather on the thick side. I should've drawn it, it's been years since I could just visualize stuff like that and be able to count on getting it right.
Re: a comment on Tide Pool by middenHeap	19-Jan-04/9:48 AM
Everybody? No, that would be horus8 & darkangel. I am only a trinity.
Re: a comment on Tide Pool by middenHeap	19-Jan-04/6:28 AM
Hmm, why does "thing" bug you? The pome is intended as a metaphor about the interaction between big-R Romantic & RatMat, or Science. Note it's ambivalent & doesn't claim either mode is intrinsically better than the other. So it's a thing to the Romantic narrator, he hasn't the nomenclature the collector likely has. You're right about 'till though. Silly affectation. I will change it.
Re: a comment on Jennifer Entire by Goad	19-Jan-04/6:11 AM
Thanks for the comments! This was an experiment, trying to capture the way the real Jennifer actually talked -- flitting from idea to idea, sometimes with the connections missing. It is composed of fragments related by shared nouns & verbs. You can place punctuation and conjunctive phrases in many alternate places, and get different sentences. For example in line 12 the word details is noun or verb depending which phrase you're putting it in. I often do this once as the key line of a poem but here I'm doing it once or more on almost every line. But you're right, no one will ever give a fuck about this silly theory. Should see the response on Eratosphere, lol, they practically lynched me.
Re: a comment on O Endless Angst, Thou Stingeth Me by Goad	19-Jan-04/5:59 AM
It's a 9 year old poem, written while I was wandering the west coast living from a backpack. I titled it so to poke fun at myself. My intentions are to try to learn to write a little bit of real poetry -- real things, real situations etc., a la your Woodsworth quote -- after many years of not writing. But instead I have a decided tendency to cop out and write in big abstractions like a teenager. So, I'm mocking my own big-P poems, as you called them, to try and send a message to the creative part of my brain (assuming it isn't wholy atrophied) that they aren't really what I want. That's probably more psychology than anyone wished to know, but hey you asked, and I'm an exhibitionist (figuratively only, of course).
Re: a comment on Liberty! by fevriere	17-Jan-04/2:09 PM
It's miscategorized, but it's in any case worlds better than most of the shit we have to wade through, so maybe some encouragement is in order?
Re: (Come find me) by zodiac	17-Jan-04/10:48 AM
I like the first three stanza's quite a lot, but the end doesn't cut it. What are you saying, that the whimsy of a sentient fungus is not just a metaphor and this is a horror poem? Or are you alluding to the effects of poison/hallucinogenic mushrooms -- if so it could be sketched much better. But you taught me a new word, that's pretty rare, lol. Nitpick: no need to say great when in the next line you say colossal.
Re: Liberty! by fevriere	17-Jan-04/10:34 AM
This is an excellent exultation. Hoot'n'holler!
Re: a comment on Why you don't fall through the floor by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?	15-Jan-04/1:02 PM
A triangular manhole cover with a relative thickness comparable to the circular manhole covers I have seen wouldn't fall in without a bit of chiselling.
Re: a comment on Victory smokes & black tiger ambrosia by Don-Quixote	13-Jan-04/1:33 PM
Your critique is flawed in every point, as I will demonstrate: i) Tool have only the one song, so far as I know 1) If you put hemlock in vinegar, it is very bitter indeed. Hemlock is what they used to kill Socrates (possibly mixed with opium) 2) that was an interesting experience, but had no effect one way or the other on my reading of the poem 3) on the other hand, torpid still finds occasional use & can even be considered, though marginally, acceptable. Is this not unfair? 4) you stole point 4 from eratosphere, where I believe they have it set up as an auto-responder to all posts originating from ip's that have at any time in the past been associated with pomeranker 5) and tigers, hence Hobbes, hence by association Calvin, representative of little boys, and what is the yearning to express oneself in amateur poetics other than the little boy (or girl) in all of us giving voice to his little boyness? (or little girlness, as the case may be) 6) jimi 7) the strength of the magnetic force field of the earth has declined by MORE THAN 10% in the past 20 years (requires schizophrenia)
Re: a comment on O Endless Angst, Thou Stingeth Me by Goad	13-Jan-04/12:53 PM
Thank you, honourable Feline. I approached the crafting of this pome as I approach every task in life, however mundane: with a) careful precision; b) rigorous determination; and c) a keen yearning to excel, to make an orderly difference in this chaotic world. That I have succeeded in some small part in this instance certainly brings me a modicum of pleasure. No, that is unfair. I ought rather to say it brings me BOUNTIFUL pleasure, a pleasure that beats in my breast like the joyful drumming of the wings of a partridge, startled into joyous flight from its secluded clearing (where it sedately fed on the winter berries) by the advent of the forest caretaker. I will close now, lest I display emotion inappropriate for this forum.
Re: a comment on O Endless Angst, Thou Stingeth Me by Goad	13-Jan-04/12:39 PM
I trust you're not mocking me. This is a deeply personal poem, and it was with great trepidation that I ventured to post it here. I can only trust that the readers will approach it with the sensitivity I feel it rightly deserves. No, that should be demand. With the sensitivity that I DEMAND it rightly deserves.
Re: a comment on Passing of Wind by Goad	12-Jan-04/4:48 PM
omigod, I swear to god I was completely oblivious to the homosexual overtones of this pome. That's so cool. It's so blatant, now that you mention it. It makes it an even better, uh, tribute to electroman1979.
Re: a comment on The Blues by fevriere	12-Jan-04/2:07 PM
That's a beautifully evocative image. I'm resonating myself after reading it. Nevertheless, I confess it saddens me to imagine I'll remain untouched, alone and...quivering.