on some deleted poem
29 Aug 2003, 12:22 AM
REminds me of the Venus of Willendorf.
on some deleted poem
23 Aug 2003, 1:33 AM
Wow...you really ARE the more fucked up one...
on some deleted poem
21 Aug 2003, 3:39 PM
Ilove you...
on some deleted poem
3 Sep 2003, 3:45 PM
Could use a little re-working, but I like it. Strong imagery. 7
on Dance With Me by marvelis
26 Aug 2003, 3:58 PM
Yeah, there's some pretty interesting fairy tale porn stars they might want to marry.
No man dreams of a snotty princess bitch who orders them around, Jesus!
No man dreams of a snotty princess bitch who orders them around, Jesus!
on What Do You Want From Me? by Bonehiss
22 Aug 2003, 11:06 AM
Nice. 6
on One Moment to the Other (v2) by nentwined
21 Aug 2003, 11:01 PM
A little too much Pink Floyd.....
on A Surgeons Butchery by SupremeDreamer
22 Aug 2003, 12:42 AM
"Slices Lesions" is kinda weak...I think a lesion is a surface abrasion, not a cut, so to speak. Not positive onthat, though.
on Balances (sorry for all caps) by zarathustra
22 Aug 2003, 12:44 AM
Love the "sidewalk go dalmation." I like this poem, good imagery (not too pushy). Nice, 7
on some deleted poem
22 Aug 2003, 12:50 AM
I think that if you elude an overt profundity of adjectives, you might be able to get your imagery across clearner and more seductively.
on Totally Hair by TanHand
21 Aug 2003, 3:46 PM
I believe the term was "perfect"
on stop poking me georges seurat by coolassbob
21 Aug 2003, 3:49 PM
Uhhh...I think if he read this, he'd laugh in your puffy-eyed face! Nonetheless, this takes neurotic to another level. 6.
on some deleted poem
21 Aug 2003, 3:57 PM
This poem is like Eva's cheesecake...the only good part is the crust (at the BOTTOM). You need to make your work more fluffy. Try messing around with the temperature.
on some deleted poem
21 Aug 2003, 4:01 PM
Jermi has the same haircut as Pete Yorne!
:D I'm already going to get a shit kicking anyway...
but everybody does...
:D I'm already going to get a shit kicking anyway...
but everybody does...
on some deleted poem
21 Aug 2003, 4:05 PM
WHATEVER, There is NOTHING more important in life than hair. You are a sad, sad boy(girl?)thingy...
Oh yeah, and Jermi has the same hair as Pete Yorn.
Oh yeah, and Jermi has the same hair as Pete Yorn.
on some deleted poem
3 Sep 2003, 11:39 AM
You are psycho!
on some deleted poem
22 Aug 2003, 11:08 AM
Booooooooooooooooo! 1
on Piano Guitar Passion by Don-Quixote
25 Aug 2003, 10:24 AM
Aaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!! Bad metaphors, AUGH!!!!!!!
on some deleted poem
22 Aug 2003, 11:01 AM
What is an Ornella?
on some deleted poem
27 Dec 2004, 11:08 PM
uhhhhhhhh...........