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21-Aug-03/3:39 PM |
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| Re: Totally Hair by TanHand |
21-Aug-03/3:46 PM |
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I believe the term was "perfect"
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| Re: stop poking me georges seurat by coolassbob |
21-Aug-03/3:49 PM |
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Uhhh...I think if he read this, he'd laugh in your puffy-eyed face! Nonetheless, this takes neurotic to another level. 6.
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21-Aug-03/3:57 PM |
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This poem is like Eva's cheesecake...the only good part is the crust (at the BOTTOM). You need to make your work more fluffy. Try messing around with the temperature.
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21-Aug-03/4:01 PM |
Jermi has the same haircut as Pete Yorne!
:D I'm already going to get a shit kicking anyway...
but everybody does...
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21-Aug-03/4:05 PM |
WHATEVER, There is NOTHING more important in life than hair. You are a sad, sad boy(girl?)thingy...
Oh yeah, and Jermi has the same hair as Pete Yorn.
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| Re: One Moment to the Other (v2) by nentwined |
21-Aug-03/11:01 PM |
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A little too much Pink Floyd.....
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| Re: A Surgeons Butchery by SupremeDreamer |
22-Aug-03/12:42 AM |
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"Slices Lesions" is kinda weak...I think a lesion is a surface abrasion, not a cut, so to speak. Not positive onthat, though.
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| Re: Balances (sorry for all caps) by zarathustra |
22-Aug-03/12:44 AM |
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Love the "sidewalk go dalmation." I like this poem, good imagery (not too pushy). Nice, 7
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22-Aug-03/12:50 AM |
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I think that if you elude an overt profundity of adjectives, you might be able to get your imagery across clearner and more seductively.
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22-Aug-03/11:01 AM |
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| Re: What Do You Want From Me? by Bonehiss |
22-Aug-03/11:06 AM |
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22-Aug-03/11:08 AM |
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23-Aug-03/1:33 AM |
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Wow...you really ARE the more fucked up one...
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| Re: Piano Guitar Passion by Don-Quixote |
25-Aug-03/10:24 AM |
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Aaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!! Bad metaphors, AUGH!!!!!!!
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| Re: Dance With Me by marvelis |
26-Aug-03/3:58 PM |
Yeah, there's some pretty interesting fairy tale porn stars they might want to marry.
No man dreams of a snotty princess bitch who orders them around, Jesus!
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29-Aug-03/12:22 AM |
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REminds me of the Venus of Willendorf.
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3-Sep-03/11:39 AM |
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3-Sep-03/3:45 PM |
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Could use a little re-working, but I like it. Strong imagery. 7
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