| Re: Bed by swift_enterprises |
10-Aug-03/6:48 AM |
come on, a bit of effort.nice imagery, but it could be much better
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| Re: The Adulterous by Caducus |
11-Aug-03/7:09 AM |
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| Re: The Bloody War Of Angels by Caducus |
11-Aug-03/7:15 AM |
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a work of art.lessson for us all.
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11-Aug-03/7:16 AM |
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| Re: Speaking my mind. Brilliant Idea! by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
13-Aug-03/4:21 AM |
I like it.Very symbolic.
question:any chance you could look and review mine, the last two on my list?
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| Re: Fall Of The Heartlands by Mr Pig |
13-Aug-03/4:28 AM |
supreme. i like the feeling in it.the imagery is so vivid.
question:i have asked a few people to look at the last two in my list,would you too?
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14-Aug-03/6:28 AM |
a real thought provoker.i like it.my type of poem.keep it up
question:any chance you could look at two of my poems?'Memory' and 'Incomplete'?i would really appreciate it
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| Re: missing time by Bill Z Bub |
14-Aug-03/6:30 AM |
good use of imagery and emotion.creates a nice scene in the mind.i like it.
question:any chance you could review 2 of my peoms? 'Memory' and 'Incomplete'? i would really appreciate it
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| Re: The Wooden Armchair Of Similar Dreams by Caducus |
14-Aug-03/3:17 PM |
first of all, thanks for the comments.
second,i like it.it is, what seems to me, to be quite nostalgic.i duno, i have always had a thing for personal and nostalgic poetry,and this fits in here.very well written. 10
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14-Aug-03/3:23 PM |
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i like the imagery.i like the way that you touch on the awkwardness, i suppose i could compare to the feeling to W.B.Yeats's poem 'Twice Shy'? know it? 9
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14-Aug-03/3:27 PM |
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14-Aug-03/3:37 PM |
we all know the feeling.personal,i like personal.i like poems of reality not made up bullshit unrequited(spelling) love and stuff.like i said,i like it. 10
question:i'm new to this place,and a young writer.i've already asked some other people to look at my poems,and i'd appreciate it if you could give me your response to them.
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| Re: Incomplete by Hostileintent |
14-Aug-03/3:55 PM |
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yea. i put this poem in last year in a competition.got to the semi. when in school i studied the work of Gerard Manley Hopkins. i loved him,and his so many unique styles. i just took one, which as you said is, splitting the line up into two,and putting the first part last.thanks for the comments
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| Re: Incomplete by Hostileintent |
14-Aug-03/3:56 PM |
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thanks for the comments and support everybody.much appreciated.
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| Re: 'Where I come from- S.M.C!!' by Hostileintent |
14-Aug-03/4:01 PM |
READ READ READ READ READ READ
never thought of translating it sorry. here is the translation for the last two stanzas:
Yes.Sport is extremely important
Perhaps it's the most important
But the don't put an emphasis,on sport as a whole
What about free development, Nothing
I now understand the life of the teenager
I see it's full of filthy dirty injustice
But overall- Saint Munchins College has brought
Me to a man from a naive teenager
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the sport refers to the fact that my school always prided itself on its sport,but the fact is that it is a rugby school.rugby only.other sport is shunned.so i say 'how can one develop freely'
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