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11-Sep-02/6:30 PM |
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hot damn, pete. welcome back. butterflies with nascent cyclones tucked within their wings. yes. very much yes.
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11-Sep-02/7:45 PM |
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i could languish in that bed all day... thanks for the picture, mrs.g.
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11-Sep-02/7:48 PM |
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so, you can die for joy, but not for pain. listening through the walls... i cringe. that's the sort of sound you just can't tear yourself away from, as it tears you in two. --please fix the ???'s, though.
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11-Sep-02/7:52 PM |
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these are sweet and innocent; but you miss the point of haiku. it's not just about counting. ask nentwined.
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| Re: Milk & Honey with a touch of PCP <the dead cat edit> by horus8 |
11-Sep-02/7:59 PM |
updowside runandhide feathers and beaks, the words he tweaks
and has unleashed on the eyes of men
and women pixellated and fixellated and fornicated and fragmentated
and swirling and dervishing about my ears until in tears
i beg...just one little bite?
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11-Sep-02/8:20 PM |
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| Re: A missing puzzle piece. by trev086 |
11-Sep-02/8:21 PM |
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| Re: Untitled by ErgoErgun |
11-Sep-02/10:29 PM |
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wanting meat is fine, and blood is necessary, but the finest slices can be soaked in their own, and lose their appeal. perhaps it is not want but need you seek?
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12-Sep-02/6:54 AM |
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oh. i like this a lot. to make a mystery of the everyday, that is is magic.
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| Re: Lysander cried by bornagainpoet |
12-Sep-02/9:01 PM |
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or with L. from midsummernight's dream? or with the judge?
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13-Sep-02/7:51 AM |
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revenge is a dish best served cold...?
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| Re: Full Fathom Five by vulcan |
13-Sep-02/7:57 AM |
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this is good, vulcan. may i make a few suggestions, to tighten it up?
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13-Sep-02/8:02 AM |
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very nice, but, where are the birds? (kidding) two things: first line is awkward. also, is a car crash really a simple clap? isn't it more complex than that, with all those different materials meeting and simultaneously shattering?
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13-Sep-02/8:05 AM |
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Katie, this is a nice idea (that has been done to death) BUT please do not insult us by putting this online with so many typos and misspellings. it's just careless, and embarrassing for you. put your best foot forward, if you're going to step out at all.
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13-Sep-02/8:05 AM |
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| Re: pissed off pretentious prat by keatsImnot |
13-Sep-02/8:06 AM |
nice, but exile/all alone is redundant... uzwyze, nice job
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13-Sep-02/8:59 AM |
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you night want to stop passing off joke poems commonly found on the internet as your own work. it makes you look like an ass.
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| Re: 9/11 by dougsoderstrom |
13-Sep-02/9:05 AM |
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now, was that really necessary, doug? any of it?
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13-Sep-02/12:07 PM |
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SWEET! try lain instead of 'layed'
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| Re: Mother! by kawakurdi |
13-Sep-02/12:48 PM |
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and gives an eternal abode for him as well. As a poem, this short piece encapsulates your anguish succinctly, kawakurdi. i feel it when i read it.
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