Re: The Courtesan by horus8	1-Apr-03/10:27 AM
It is beautiful...but...It seems unfinished.
Re: Summer by MaliqaTara	1-Apr-03/9:59 AM
This one hits me where it's tender. I like it :)
Re: a comment on prettycock by kthulah	31-Mar-03/8:37 PM
40+ men are the best in my opinion. Usually by then they've handled whatever sexual identity issues they have, and their hormones have stabilized to a point where they're really interested in pleasing their partner, and not half interested as a by the way... Yes, prettycock has a webcam...and loves to serve and perform for women.
Re: A Little Too Long by calilegzzz	31-Mar-03/8:29 PM
I like it :)
Re: fever by <~>	31-Mar-03/8:18 PM
w00t!
Re: a comment on prettycock by kthulah	31-Mar-03/12:25 PM
Hmmm...Well, do you live in the UK? Do you like 40+ men? or do you have a webcam?
Re: a comment on central line by kthulah	24-Mar-03/1:48 PM
I think you're right.
Re: a comment on easy by kthulah	22-Mar-03/4:03 AM
Hmmm...Well what would be a better name than "easy"?
Re: a comment on easy by kthulah	21-Mar-03/3:01 AM
Once I know a love is unrequited, I am very easy to get rid of.
Re: Nutty by Bacchus	21-Mar-03/12:13 AM
It doesn't read like poetry to me, but then I haven't heard it spoken. It could be...like a sort of a monologue form of it. It's scary, though. I know people who've tried to do this to me. I generally help them find their way out of my life.
Re: a comment on squeeze by kthulah	20-Mar-03/11:04 PM
::blush::
Re: a comment on squeeze by kthulah	17-Mar-03/12:48 AM
Dark, she's vamping. Just let it go. I'll keep these comments for the record, and delete any that she makes on my poetry in the future. I'd advise that you and others do the same. The pattern: 1. Stupid comment. 2. Response to her stupid comment. 3. Justification of her comment with something even more stupid. 4. Response... 5. Pity garnering, but peppered with more stupid comments. 6. Argument about built up stupidity and resentment from others who've been sucked into her game, ensues. It's a classic case of vamping. Don't indulge it. I won't be from here on.
Re: a comment on squeeze by kthulah	17-Mar-03/12:43 AM
I don't need your apologies. Your distance will do.
Re: a comment on squeeze by kthulah	16-Mar-03/10:54 AM
"Private" would work if by "special" I meant "private". I meant "special" as in unique to that particular moment (when he's overwhelmed). As far as the [something], I supposed burrow, rucksack, and a few other orifice implying words would work as far as rhythm, but they wouldn't have quite the same implications as "den". "lion's den" "den of iniquity" "pool table in the den" I've heard the "stir with the cup" saying before, but from a Chinese lady. I am not Indonesian. I'm an American of mixed ethnicity, but politically identified as Black.
Re: a comment on squeeze by kthulah	16-Mar-03/2:22 AM
I'm not sure what being Jewish or Muslim has to do with it. ...and by the way, I'm an occasional "raghead" myself. The proper term for it is "hijabi", someone who wears hijab. Though generous with my friends, on the street it is prudent at times to make a point of one's selectivity.
Re: a comment on squeeze by kthulah	15-Mar-03/11:31 PM
Okay, tell me a word that would be more personal than "special", yet means something similar, and is two syllables with the accent on the first, the first also "short", and the second syllable "longer", and perhaps I'll see your point. As far as the vulgarity, this is relative, and a matter of your personal moral code, not the quality of the poem. The rhythm is sound, and it gets the desired message across. If you have a problem with the nature of my vagina not as a flaccid receiver, but as a dynamic part of my body, then you are going to have a great many personal problems with a good deal of my poetry...and none of it will help you as a critic. So my personal advice for your personal problem is do more Kegel exercises. When you're well on your way in that, talk to some long standing decent courtesans, for the fine tuning (learning to flex the various areas at will, and honing automatic reactions as a sort of reward factor for the man hitting the right spots, as well as how to deal with the "baboon lips" soreness that you'll get once you're very developed, if you haven't had the shaft in a week or two) and then come back and read this poem then. When your vagina is like a nice place to visit, with spectacular events, you'll understand it...and this is not to brag. It is an easily attainable goal for most women. It's just a matter of practice. You'll be old fashioned Chinese guy worthy when you can do 1000+ reps in succession.
Re: a comment on squeeze by kthulah	15-Mar-03/2:12 AM
Well, too much rephrasing and omission would break the rhythm and change the meaning...tilting the balance more towards the emotional and less towards the physical. There's a reason this poem wasn't categorized as freeverse, and there is also a reason that the language is somewhat simple. The poem was intended to come across exactly as you said...squeezing his penis with my vagina. There are few ways of describing it that wouldn't be too formal to get the message across to one who is somewhat blunt...the inspiration for this poem. Perhaps you expect too much of poetry. It's not always about lofty subjects. Sometimes it's just about a woman's lust for a man who doesn't mince words. Since he doesn't, I didn't either.
Re: a comment on squeeze by kthulah	14-Mar-03/10:35 PM
Comments, especially critiques, are most helpful when they are coherent.
Re: A Pirate's Sonnet by snacktime	11-Dec-02/11:19 PM
Argh!
Re: Dead Eye by kthulah	24-Aug-02/2:02 AM
Density isn't the issue...At the time, it was written as a message...long story. For the general public, though, I probably should add a couple more stanzas at the beginning. My perspective of the world at large might be a little skewed because I've been around mostly people who are mystics in some way, all my life. When that's a social basis, rather than one being a sort of an island of awareness in a sea of oblivion, one tends to write as if it's common. I'll see what I can do for the revision.