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15-Jun-03/12:36 PM |
Take out the explanation and just capitalize it, and let it stimulate both ideas whether month or person, the end explains it fine. Except take your parenthesied gibberish out.
This piece is by far one of your more accesible poems. I liked it, because it helped my see you better.
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| Re: Seven by Dangzter |
15-Jun-03/1:06 PM |
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| Re: Seven by Dangzter |
15-Jun-03/1:52 PM |
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Lord, don't let me in. Save yourself from the onslaught of homosexuals, niggers, chinks, and Jews that would inturn ensue. Think of the integrity of heaven Lord. I believe, Lord, I must decline because I love you and the others to much to risk the impurity.
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| Re: Sittin Here by psikosis |
15-Jun-03/1:58 PM |
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I concure with Richa. It's too loose.
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| Re: Seven by Dangzter |
15-Jun-03/2:00 PM |
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Excuse me Lord, but that's my foot.
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| Re: Seven by Dangzter |
15-Jun-03/2:05 PM |
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"TAKE COVER JESU!!!! WHEN I DIED THEY WERE RIGHT ON MY TAIL!" <From the scratchings of Saint Germaine 'the charismaticly uncommited' in the book of 'robe' chapter 'terry cloth' footnoot "why my sloth has three toes".>
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| Re: Seven by Dangzter |
15-Jun-03/2:15 PM |
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| Re: Seven by Dangzter |
15-Jun-03/2:17 PM |
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That was fun. Whatta I owe ya?
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| Re: Seven by Dangzter |
15-Jun-03/2:19 PM |
IT WASN'T MY FAULT! THE VOICES! I THOUGHT IT WAS YOU! But since you don't have any lips and resemble more of an ff pink amoeba I know now I was wrong, forgive me God *Bang*
*BANG*
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| Re: Seven by Dangzter |
15-Jun-03/2:21 PM |
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| Re: I Offer Me by leviathan |
15-Jun-03/6:33 PM |
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16-Jun-03/1:11 PM |
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16-Jun-03/1:13 PM |
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When you substituted live for "leave" is when my mailbox exploded.
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| Re: Seven by Dangzter |
16-Jun-03/1:20 PM |
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Pardon me, but do you have any Grey poupon?
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| Re: Wounds never to heal by Freethinker1602 |
16-Jun-03/1:46 PM |
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I liked it up until my left hand turned into a radioactive porta potty and regurgitated blue curdled turds about my work space.
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| Re: The Sadistic Mirth by Freethinker1602 |
16-Jun-03/1:51 PM |
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The only thing you have in life is an ace homepage. The rest you stole from kids on the short bus.
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| Re: Our New Tongue by Christof |
16-Jun-03/2:49 PM |
This children is Christof, he is poet, where and when you newbies are not, reap it!
This poem, by the way Christ (if I may use diminutives) is just splendid, have an 8, i actually think it deserves a nine, but since you are an exceptional poet. I can't honestly read all of your poems and give them what they deserve, because then, I believe, I would just be knocking myself out of the top fifteen, and since everyone hates me, it would be impossible to recover my standings, forgive me oh dead composer.
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| Re: Belongings by Christof |
16-Jun-03/2:50 PM |
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Good god have a Platinum Q-tip awarde, that was simply the best.
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| Re: Butcher by Christof |
16-Jun-03/2:52 PM |
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You are unstoppable, you are a master!
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| Re: The Hand of God by Christof |
16-Jun-03/2:54 PM |
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Snooze button blues. Your symbolism in this piece is definitely beta realm sleep depravation.
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