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Sittin Here (Free verse) by psikosis
Sitting here, all alone, feelings inside, making me hide. I think of you all day long, telling myself, just be strong. It will get better, you will see, I say. Knowing it comes closer everyday. I do it for you, I do it for us, and in that I do trust.

Up the ladder: Burning Fire
Down the ladder: location 999

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.8
Weighted score: 4.8569565
Overall Rank: 10468
Posted: June 13, 2003 8:50 PM PDT; Last modified: June 13, 2003 8:50 PM PDT
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[n/a] richa @ 195.92.168.173 | 14-Jun-03/10:42 AM | Reply
No, this is too obvious the rhyme/ the sentiment

Try get to the root of the feeling and its relation to other things
[6] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 15-Jun-03/1:58 PM | Reply
I concure with Richa. It's too loose.
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