regarding some deleted poem...	19-Sep-03/2:14 PM
Yep.
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Sep-03/2:17 PM
The title's beautiful.
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Sep-03/2:28 PM
Change strain to stain and shine to barracuda. How was being dead? People, actually called my home. I hope you are proud of yourself young Pan. Now i want my payment promptly, we had a deal. Fool the ranker for you to duck tape your soul to my pigeon's (Vagina) third-leg's shoe sole after chianti and lukewarming doversole with pipe noodle's alfredo. Then, of course we swap gaids and airbrush the whole headboard cracking fairy buggering murel on the van's side. Like in the 70's. We had a deal.
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Sep-03/2:32 PM
The question marks bother me but the sentiment is ghoulishly pecking. 7.
Re: killer boredom butterfly (psychedelic) by nentwined	19-Sep-03/3:52 PM
fabulous, one of my all time favourite vilanelles, and in fact, it's the one I taught myself how to write vilanelles with a year ago, thankyou. 9.
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Sep-03/4:05 PM
Discursive, yet appetizing and filling. Ace! 11
Re: The words of touch by TheVoiceless	19-Sep-03/4:07 PM
Jesus was no superstar. He was a superstar with cheese minus the special sauce.
Re: The words of touch by TheVoiceless	19-Sep-03/4:13 PM
[x] AABBCC rhyming scheme [x] About romantic love [x] Arbitrary indentation [x] Arbitrary line breaks [x] Autobiographical but in the third person [x] Clerical errors [x] Cliched rhymes (love/above etc.) [_] Cliched adolescent metaphors of darkness for despair etc. [x] Devoid of alliteration or any such linguistic embellishments [_] Devoid of rhyme [_] Devoid of simile, reification or any such literary devices [_] Devoid of wond'rous or fantastical imagery [x] Drug references [_] Elves, unicorns, etc. [_] Exclamation points used to mark 'the funny bits' [_] Insipidly whimsical or zany [_] Leaving rant [_] Lower case only [_] Melodramatic [_] Naively religious or superstitious [x] Obsessed with femininity [_] Overabundance of ellipses [_] Overuse of Latinate words and/or convoluted sentence structures [x] Pointedly unanswered questions [_] Protagonist has a smug name [_] Rage against the machine [_] References to the author's 'social life' [_] Repetition of a single word or phrase to the point of nausea [x] Sanctimoniously moral [x] Sappy _[] Self-pity [_] Suicide-related [x] Wish fulfilment
regarding some deleted poem...	20-Sep-03/3:45 PM
Sqwuelcher?
Re: I hate your guts and think you're stupid by horus8	20-Sep-03/5:20 PM
I am debonaire and handsome, trust me. but I guess the wings and fangs give it away sometimes.
Re: the wire by Bill Z Bub	20-Sep-03/5:42 PM
"found a hand, instead of you"
regarding some deleted poem...	20-Sep-03/6:01 PM
Could you rhyme return with saturn, and onto with into, please.
regarding some deleted poem...	20-Sep-03/7:33 PM
A treasure of words. A chowder of chow. A caucaphony of provolone, and suchers.
Re: minotaur by Bill Z Bub	20-Sep-03/7:37 PM
Profound, but somehow the last stanza is too giving? Does that make any sense?
Re: Lotion by impert&ent	20-Sep-03/7:47 PM
[_] AABB rhyming scheme [X] About romantic love [_] About poetry-writing [x] About suicide or self-mutilation [_] Arbitrary indentation [x] Arbitrary line breaks [_] Autobiographical but in the third person [x] Clerical errors [x] Cliched imagery (staring out of window, pits of despair) [_] Cliched rhymes (love/above etc.) [x] Devoid of alliteration or any such linguistic embellishments [x] Devoid of rhyme [_] Devoid of simile, reification or any such literary devices [_] Devoid of wond'rous or fantastical imagery [_] Drug references [_] Elves, unicorns, etc. [_] Exclamation points used to mark 'the funny bits' [x] Insipidly whimsical or zany [_] Leaving rant [_] Lower case only [_] 'Lyrics' [x] Melodramatic [_] Naively religious or superstitious [xxx] Obsessed with femininity [_] Overabundance of ellipses [x] Overuse of 'depression' words (putrid, wretched, darkness, etc) [x] Pointedly unanswered questions [x] Protagonist has a smug name [_] Rage against the machine [_] References to the author's 'social life' [_] Repetition of a single word or phrase to the point of nausea [_] Sanctimoniously moral [_] Sentimental [x] Author is self-obsessed [_] Thesaurophilia [_] Use of internet shorthand or emoticons [_] Vicarious wish fulfilment
Re: Lotion by impert&ent	20-Sep-03/7:47 PM
Wait let me give you a 7, because the title is killer.
Re: Murderers in the Tropics by Fear of Garbage	20-Sep-03/8:25 PM
"safe and warm" swap those two to "warm and safe". Other wise i thought this poem was a 10 and should get a GQT for sure. Strong symbolism, fantastic story and realtime essence, really, really a lovely piece.
Re: Psypher the new coming by Nirvana13666	22-Sep-03/3:06 PM
Yes, very.
Re: Lacking by Nirvana13666	22-Sep-03/3:08 PM
Starts quite strong, but then unravels towards the end in cliche imagery.
Re: Madam Z - [<~>] - Snake Pen & Holy Grail by SupremeDreamer	22-Sep-03/3:09 PM
Yesterday, i sold my lips for a pair of matching butresses.