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minotaur (Free verse) by Bill Z Bub keep one hand
on the wall
and turn
to face the bull
this child
of ancient curse
did work the daedalus machine
and found you tugging thread
all through these hidden halls
keep in mind
this thing
is part man
part bull
and part maze
Up the ladder:
Strung Out On Sunlight
Down the ladder:
The March of Ones Death
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Posted: September 20, 2003 2:49 PM PDT; Last modified: September 20, 2003 2:49 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.119203 Overall Rank: 5638 Comments:
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-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.86.113.159
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20-Sep-03/5:18 PM
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I don't get it. Is this supposed to be some kind of allegory or are you just giving some late advice to Theseus in all lower case?
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Bill Z Bub @ 24.43.48.67
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20-Sep-03/5:27 PM
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yes.
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-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.86.113.159
> Bill Z Bub
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20-Sep-03/6:49 PM
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Is it supposed to be some kind of allegory?
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Bill Z Bub @ 24.43.48.67
> -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
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23-Sep-03/9:32 AM
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Yes.
Profound, but somehow the last stanza is too giving? Does that make any sense?
Hot damn.
"Did work the daedalus machine"? (I know daedalus built the maze, but seems an odd way to put it.) Keenly rendered, B.Z.B., but it seems more poem fragment than poem.
It is a fragment. I plan on expanding it eventually.
The key to the (not really well thought out) metaphor is: daedalus machine = computer/internet
like the concept--look forward to seeing what you do with it.
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