on some deleted poem
25 May 2004, 6:51 PM
"I will fly"!!!! "beside her"? jesus Christ, it's like right when I think you couldn't write anything more fucking 'day 1 poetry' you do? You're like a sure bet, it's amazing. Yes, will you fly? will you cry? will you sigh? oh geeze, Will YOU JUST FUCKING DIE!!!!!!! good god, you're like the energizer bunny of contrived poetry.
on The truths of war by DeadtotheWorld
25 May 2004, 6:54 PM
Why is this on the best list?
You don't even know the difference between
"our" and "are"? If you're going to have shit grammar, do it
with some imagination could you? liken me does
you asshat.
You don't even know the difference between
"our" and "are"? If you're going to have shit grammar, do it
with some imagination could you? liken me does
you asshat.
on Spitballing by INTRANSIT
25 May 2004, 6:58 PM
Could have ended stronger.
Needs a new last line.
Needs a new last line.
on Lorca: Canción del Jinete by Sasha
25 May 2004, 6:59 PM
Is this yours, or Lorcas, or both?
on Lorca: Canción del Jinete by Sasha
25 May 2004, 7:58 PM
I see so basically you take your shit poetry, and
mix it with great poetry, and hope for the best?
How inventive.
mix it with great poetry, and hope for the best?
How inventive.
on Lorca: Canción del Jinete by Sasha
25 May 2004, 7:59 PM
Now that friend is bow'ls... I mean
I've seen some sad shit, but that's the gravy.
How's that working for you so far?
I've seen some sad shit, but that's the gravy.
How's that working for you so far?
on Lorca: Canción del Jinete by Sasha
25 May 2004, 8:51 PM
So lord! It's even worse, it's your translation of Lorca, making it both of yours? My friend that's just plagiary with a dash of brains and a dollop of cross bred boredom.
on some deleted poem
25 May 2004, 8:55 PM
Well I got to line 2, passed gas, and gave you a 10!
on Suicide of the Ego by Drifting Shadow
26 May 2004, 1:57 PM
This should be a penis monologue.
Wouldn't this make MORE sense if you were saying this to your lap?m I think so, yes, I do.
Wouldn't this make MORE sense if you were saying this to your lap?m I think so, yes, I do.
on The Babe in the Alligator Pajamas by caitydee
26 May 2004, 2:28 PM
As a young man, I thought there's not much I can hope for with this horribly deformed two inch penis, it wasn't until I discovered that my outrageously teeny pud could knock a retard up at fifty yards that I fully began to understood that the lord does indeed work in mysterious ways. Now, three trailers, three fires and five domesticate disturbance charges later we have decided, hey let's have three more! That way we have enough to go camping for real, and watch them do all the work!
Sometimes I really think Hitler did achieve something? He forced even more morons to move around the planet in bigger herds to soil their wild oats fearlessly in the hopes of replacing all of those deaths, and hey, nucleur or not, families are the future, just look at all of those young leaping arab boys with c4, they have moms and dad's and twenty brothers because 19 will die along with the jews, somebodys got to do it, I mean my two kids are too chicken, they only know how to watch barney, fart, pee, eat, sleep, and do it all over again, and yours is still so small. Lets fool them as long as we can, okay, and hide the real world from them, that way we can stay on this island of safety and keep breeding FOREVER.
Sometimes I really think Hitler did achieve something? He forced even more morons to move around the planet in bigger herds to soil their wild oats fearlessly in the hopes of replacing all of those deaths, and hey, nucleur or not, families are the future, just look at all of those young leaping arab boys with c4, they have moms and dad's and twenty brothers because 19 will die along with the jews, somebodys got to do it, I mean my two kids are too chicken, they only know how to watch barney, fart, pee, eat, sleep, and do it all over again, and yours is still so small. Lets fool them as long as we can, okay, and hide the real world from them, that way we can stay on this island of safety and keep breeding FOREVER.
on Child of Troy by Caducus
26 May 2004, 2:54 PM
Scone
on This Summers Ablaze by DeadtotheWorld
9 May 2004, 3:54 PM
My advice, get out of Idaho before you're completely retarded.
on Ghosts by unknown^user
9 May 2004, 3:59 PM
You weild a comma like a Mexican.
on some deleted poem
11 May 2004, 2:18 PM
The title has to change.
The first paragraph is hilarious,
and the second tries to hard to pull
something off that's unnecesary. so here is what I would save out of the utter tripe in your last paragraph.
"Here's my newest theory: The planes were already airborne
when a passenger asked if he could meet the pilots. The
stewardess graciously took him to the front, barged into
the "cockpit", the passenger, who just happened to be of middle eastern
descent, screamed "Jihaad!" which of course is arabic for "cocksuckers!"
and began to wrestle for
control of the aircraft sending it careeneing into
one of the two largest phallic symbols there were. Now,
if it had only been one, everything would have been fine.
No. The freakshow must go on. The process repeats itself
all to soon, and now there are two holes side by side
instead. No wonder the arabs are pissed. Even they can't stop America's
openly gay attitude.
["Here's my newest theory: The planes were already airborne
when a passenger asked if he could meet the pilots. The
stewardess graciously took him to the front, barged into
the "cockpit", the passenger, who just happened to be of middle eastern
descent, screamed "Jihaad!] this is good and [began to wrestle for
control of the aircraft sending it careeneing into
one of the two largest phallic symbols there were. ] write those statements back in with some good bridging, keep your opinion neutral, the more neutral and factual the beeter, but lose all the other crap in the second paragraph besides what's bracketed imediately.
The first paragraph is hilarious,
and the second tries to hard to pull
something off that's unnecesary. so here is what I would save out of the utter tripe in your last paragraph.
"Here's my newest theory: The planes were already airborne
when a passenger asked if he could meet the pilots. The
stewardess graciously took him to the front, barged into
the "cockpit", the passenger, who just happened to be of middle eastern
descent, screamed "Jihaad!" which of course is arabic for "cocksuckers!"
and began to wrestle for
control of the aircraft sending it careeneing into
one of the two largest phallic symbols there were. Now,
if it had only been one, everything would have been fine.
No. The freakshow must go on. The process repeats itself
all to soon, and now there are two holes side by side
instead. No wonder the arabs are pissed. Even they can't stop America's
openly gay attitude.
["Here's my newest theory: The planes were already airborne
when a passenger asked if he could meet the pilots. The
stewardess graciously took him to the front, barged into
the "cockpit", the passenger, who just happened to be of middle eastern
descent, screamed "Jihaad!] this is good and [began to wrestle for
control of the aircraft sending it careeneing into
one of the two largest phallic symbols there were. ] write those statements back in with some good bridging, keep your opinion neutral, the more neutral and factual the beeter, but lose all the other crap in the second paragraph besides what's bracketed imediately.
on some deleted poem
18 May 2004, 3:14 PM
He was a fag you tit.
on some deleted poem
1 Jun 2004, 11:36 AM
What a fucking joke, I wish JUST FOR ONCE, the stupid pointless shit that makes up your pathetic existence worked on me.
on Sex Mob by nothingtoanyone
1 Jun 2004, 11:39 AM
Unreadable BBQ'd tripe
on A Mod Proposal (of Modest Proportions) by coolassbob
2 Jun 2004, 1:22 PM
Shrapnel
on I'm Back! by wEdible Underpantsw
2 Jun 2004, 1:23 PM
Swit
You've just succesfully described every grandma in the universe. Congratulations. Way to dig crystal. 5.