| Re: Salt by <~> |
14-Aug-02/8:57 AM |
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| Re: Eleemosynary for the undeserving but forward foreigner by ErgoErgun |
14-Aug-02/9:05 AM |
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what has been raped here is the art form of Haiku. Are you trying to piss off the japanese?
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| Re: #7 by mikejedw |
14-Aug-02/9:09 AM |
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the only part I'd say doesn't fit is the word "inhaled"...
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| Re: Birth by DevilTmptrss |
14-Aug-02/9:12 AM |
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traditional and sweet. nicely done.
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| Re: Haiku by Cha no Onna |
14-Aug-02/9:16 AM |
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may work better as freeform--the images are nice.
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| Re: High? Coo... by Modulo |
14-Aug-02/9:19 AM |
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I suggest getting rid of the title. it takes away from your poem, and (traditionally) haiku are untitled.
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| Re: Clit by unknown |
14-Aug-02/9:32 AM |
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the title ruined this "poem", but the last line doomed it to be recognized as an obvious attempt at perverted silliness.
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| Re: Smaller by Modulo |
14-Aug-02/9:33 AM |
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| Re: Fireflies by mikejedw |
14-Aug-02/9:38 AM |
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