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Fireflies (Haiku) by mikejedw Fireflies at night
from time immemorial
gettin' their freak on
Up the ladder:
Fading.+/
Down the ladder:
these works
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Posted: May 10, 2002 7:45 AM PDT; Last modified: May 10, 2002 7:45 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.142886 Overall Rank: 5448 Comments:
I love this
and you are USING the cliche "time immemorial" to signify itself, adn you evoke (intentionally?" soem Tennyson thing about bees - wotsit?? the murmur of innumerable bees"?? and there's "immemorial elms" somewhere too. GREAT juxtapositon; get the joy of it, and the love of them
dull yet contemporary
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thanks
it really re echoes; really does; worth internalising