regarding some deleted poem...	29-Aug-02/7:06 PM
Is this format intentional?
Re: Thousand Tears by kristenk69lover	29-Aug-02/7:32 PM
Advice to a Girl No one worth possessing Can be quite possessed; Lay that on your heart, My young angry dear; This truth, this hard and precious stone, Lay it on your hot cheek, Let it hide your tear. Hold it like a crystal When you are alone And gaze in the depths of the icy stone. Long, look long and you will be blessed: No one worth possessing Can be quite possessed. -Sara Teasdale
Re: An Introduction by 1Sapphire1	30-Aug-02/8:41 AM
female descendants in our Family get guns. Not quite as cuddly, but tis better to shed bullets than tears, my dear.
Re: The boy who shot birds by Bachus	30-Aug-02/8:00 PM
>Deep within this madness my brain is hitching unhealthy rides< This is it. Fucking Spot On! 10 for that sentence alone.
Re: The Crutchling by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	30-Aug-02/8:25 PM
I hear the scratching at night. I know there's a Crutchling in my closet. Go check! Fuck you! I'm not looking!
Re: S by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	30-Aug-02/8:35 PM
I noticed you were Short on S. Not one JeSu could hold it on itS end. Now you go and do thiS? What would happen if you put it where it belongS? Is it Sin?
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Sep-02/7:27 PM
You let us peer well into the depths of a raped Woman's hell. 10/10
Re: One Size Fits Most by Lenore	1-Sep-02/7:35 PM
Thank you, glad you like it. Big Matriarchy? Where?
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Sep-02/8:02 PM
I get the impression you don't think too highly of Women. I'm also fairly sure you weren't trying to send that message. even so, that is what comes through, for me at least. (not that it matters I suppose) Anyhow.. I Love your work but this one seems to be lacking in something... substance perhaps?? 7/10
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Sep-02/8:13 PM
I took >I dreamt I could tell> as tell/blowing the whistle/ratting the prick out etc. I wouldn't change that line at all. To me that was an important part of the pain. She dreamt she could tell like a little girl dreams of becoming a princess. It could never REALLY happen. Why they think they can't tell makes it all the more tragic.
Re: Hypocrites by PawnedTidal	1-Sep-02/8:28 PM
This could be a truly, nasty, bitter poem if polished up some. 5/10
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Sep-02/8:40 PM
I sincerely hope my man loves me more than his Black and Tans. Let me tell you, I could write an epic about his frosty mug love affair with those beers. Men!
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Sep-02/9:05 PM
mute hold the 's' definetly. cupped doesn't feel soft or sexy enough for me, other than that I love it. 8/10
Re: the mattress is a magnet by silvertongueddevil	3-Sep-02/8:37 PM
change the last line to >to the warm flesh lonely people.< and keep going! I was really into this and then it just stops. Where's the big finish?
regarding some deleted poem...	3-Sep-02/9:05 PM
horus-put his pottie in the closet and be done with it.
Re: d e e p e r by daniella	3-Sep-02/9:20 PM
This reminds me of a Beatles tune, the name of which escapes me at the moment. The format made it a bit hard to read but It does evoke the feeling of drifting softly down beneath the sea. nice! 7/10
regarding some deleted poem...	3-Sep-02/9:45 PM
*vegas-strangeness-pernacious-wageless-tameness-shameless-faithless-basis-horus-bacchus and one of my personal faves.......anus!
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Sep-02/11:22 AM
This is crap. blood curling anial crap. If there is such a thing, which there isn't but its still crrrrap!
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Sep-02/11:23 AM
Poo.
Re: A Musical Dream by vulcan	6-Sep-02/11:25 AM
It's no Rocky Horror Picture Show but it will do....... I suppose. ;)