on Gone by Katie2
27 Mar 2003, 8:35 AM
I've been there, good job on showing your feelings, but i agree it could use more imagery. Try to make the reader feel the pain, dont just describe it.
replying on Attention! - To the Wondering Soul by darkhelmet10
24 Mar 2003, 4:38 PM
About my comment on their being no evil, i was basing that on what Confucious's ideas were. The only question is who is evil and who is good. The Iraqi's and/or terrorists themselves dont think of themselves as evil, they think of themselves as the good guys, but whoever wins will end up being the "good guys", thats just how history works. So yes, there is evil, but it depends on the point of view you're at
on Sympathy for a Pig by phbiscuit
27 Oct 2002, 5:34 AM
i like the general concept of it and it flows rather well
on Meaning........ by Hispanic_gurl2004
27 Oct 2002, 5:32 AM
a lot of thought into it, but it culd use a little structure work, but since its just basic free verse its ok
on A Well Worth Wait by savannah
27 Oct 2002, 5:21 AM
good content but could use more of a rythmic feel
on My cousin's baby sitter. by Bachus
26 Oct 2002, 5:38 PM
not exactly a haiku but i guess it works...